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"When I came to Canada..." - additional info - university of waterloo



Sifan 2 / 2  
Feb 20, 2011   #1
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When I came to Canada two years ago, I faced much adversity like many other newcomers. Not only did I have difficulties understanding lessons and communicating with other people, I also found it very tough to get used to the cultural differences. For example, it took me a long time to learn not to avoid eye contact with teachers because the lack of eye contact is a sign of disrespect in Canada, which is opposite to my culture. I felt stressed and anxious, while I was trying to survive these physical and psychological challenges that I encountered. I tried to get involved in many extracurricular activities, where I was able to meet people who shared my love in music and math. As time went by, I found myself being surrounded by many friends. With their help, I started to make progress gradually. Although I still make some mistakes now, I am feeling more confident than ever.

baboo - / 1  
Feb 21, 2011   #2
wow its really good the only thing is that i think you should rephrase the last line,
silentwf 2 / 4  
Feb 23, 2011   #3
Great essay, but i think you could remove the commas in the sentences "I felt stressed..." and "I tried to get involved..."

I agree with baboo, maybe rephrase the last sentence to "Although I still make some mistakes now, I feel more confident than ever/before"
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Feb 27, 2011   #4
the lack of eye contact is a sign of disrespect in Canada, which is opposite to my culture.

Wow, this is so interesting. If I had to go to a culture where it is disrespectful to make eye contact, I think I would offend a lot of people. I would not be able to remember to avoid eye contact! :-)

The ending is great. I love that sentence. Here, I'll make a little change:
Although I still make some mistakes now , I am feeling more confident than ever.


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