Center for Career Development - NYU Supplement for Stern

Growing up in the poorest areas of Shanghai with just my mom who earned minimal wage, I knew better than most people how important money is and how difficult life can be without it. But what I never understood was how while the majority of the Chinese, and the world population rest remained dirt poor, the top one percent continued to accumulate massive amounts of wealth. This prevalent economic inequality made me think about the possible factors and hidden forces that manipulated the distribution of wealth in human society. To better understand the issues of wealth distribution and to explore the causes for certain economic phenomenons in today's society, I want to pursue an economics degree at the New York University Stern School of Business.

The global aspects of Stern, the myriads of internship and career opportunities provided by Stern, and the Berkley Center for Entrepreneurship and Innovation are all very attractive and useful in helping me achieving my goal. Stern, located in one of the most globalized cities in the world, offers its students with many study abroad programs. With many chances to enroll in foreign schools and immerse myself in other cultures, I will surely develop stronger leadership skills and establish important connections by joining programs ranging from the one week long International Studies Program to the semester long Stern International Business Exchange Program and the NYU Office of Global Programs. I also look forward to taking advantage of the Wassermann Center for Career Development, which grants me access to thousands of top firms in New York City and around the world. But to me, the most appealing part of Stern is the Berkley Center for Entrepreneurship and Innovation. In order to have a full and clear understanding of economics, of how goods and services are produced, distributed, and consumed, I must experience the actual processes of producing, distributing and consuming the goods and services. Thus the Berkley Center is an unique feature of Stern that will tremendously boost my knowledge of economics by letting me run a business of my choice.

Growing up in the poorest areas of Shanghai with just my mom, who earned minimal wage, I knew better than most people how important money is and how difficult life can be without it...

I liked that you were able to use specific examples of NYU that would help develop your ambitions.

I, too, am applying to NYU. But if you could what did the prompt ask for?

sorry for forgetting to include the prompt. it was 1. Given your NYU campuses of interest - whether they are your primary and alternate home campuses of interest or where you would like to study away while you are a student - where, exactly, would you like to study at NYU - and why? Stern, international, nyu is an amazing global city,

2. Whether you are undecided or you have a definitive plan of study in mind, what are your academic interests and how do you plan to explore them at NYU? Dean's roundtable luncheon,

When doing mine I focused more on campuses like the New York City, Shanghai, Abu Dhabi campuses that were given as options in the Common App, not so much as in the college that you want to go into, like Stern.

Your essay sounds very pretentious. You state that you want to understand the issues of wealth distribution but you want to study at Stern? Why not at CAS? The feel I get from your essay is that you want to go to Stern to become the 1% and not for understanding wealth distributions. Try editing your essay so it doesn't sound like you're trying to BS yourself into NYU.