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I worked at the center for intellectual disabled children for one year. On the first day, I couldn't find any different between them and normal children. They were playing, having fun, and crying like any others. But when I took care of them directly, I found out that their life was very hard. Some five years old kids were small like new born babies, other kids couldn't speak a word. This might still be normal when they were young, but what will happen when they grow up? Sometimes, I looked at them and imagined a poor, slender kid strolling across the street, begging for money to live through day. Life is random; natural endowments and society demands create a lottery which largely polarizes the fortune of people. Some gets a happy life, some enjoys the wealth, and some has to suffer a difficult life. Having the better luck than many others, I feel immoral to sit there and brag about my winning of the lottery. I want to share it, help the disabled children to have a much better life.
I worked at the center for intellectual disabled children for one year. On the first day, I couldn't find any different between them and normal children. They were playing, having fun, and crying like any others. But when I took care of them directly, I found out that their life was very hard. Some five years old kids were small like new born babies, other kids couldn't speak a word. This might still be normal when they were young, but what will happen when they grow up? Sometimes, I looked at them and imagined a poor, slender kid strolling across the street, begging for money to live through day. Life is random; natural endowments and society demands create a lottery which largely polarizes the fortune of people. Some gets a happy life, some enjoys the wealth, and some has to suffer a difficult life. Having the better luck than many others, I feel immoral to sit there and brag about my winning of the lottery. I want to share it, help the disabled children to have a much better life.