Considering both the specific undergraduate school or program to which you are applying and the broader University of Pennsylvania community, what academic, research, and/or extracurricular paths do you see yourself exploring at Penn? (250 words) - Currently, my word count is 277 words. Is this too much of a stretch, and if so, how should I cut it down?
The small African American girl approaches me in the shabby playground I have come to clean up, a smile stretched across her face and blue chalk smeared on her hands. With a devilish shriek of giggles, she rapidly pats my shirt and legs, leaving behind handprints.
It was then I knew that I couldn't go through high school quietly getting A's and acing exams for my personal achievement.
In order to change the community, knowledge must be taken and implemented, and the University of Pennsylvania offers many opportunities to do so. The Vagelos Program in Life Sciences & Management bridges the divide between two seemingly unrelated fields and empowers students to bring pharmaceuticals and health care to those in need. I am eager that the program will both enrich my leadership skills and allow me to research proteins and diseases, the two areas which intrigue me. With this knowledge, I wish to become involved in the Social Impact Consulting group and work with organizations in Philadelphia by developing feasible strategies to meet goals. Whether it is with the homeless or an urban museum, the impact made will be tangible and have lasting effects on the community. I also hope to become a member of Medical Emergency Response Team and provide immediate medical care to students and Philadelphians, no matter the time of day. I am motivated to join for the possible patient interactions as well as for the experience in emergency medicine gained.
As I grimace at the chalk stains and chase the little girl, I can't help thinking that despite the long hours of missions training and pricey train tickets, the trouble was all worth it.
Do I make the paths I want to pursue clear, and do I back these up with my personal experiences?
Should I elaborate anywhere?
Thanks for your time and help :)
The small African American girl approaches me in the shabby playground I have come to clean up, a smile stretched across her face and blue chalk smeared on her hands. With a devilish shriek of giggles, she rapidly pats my shirt and legs, leaving behind handprints.
It was then I knew that I couldn't go through high school quietly getting A's and acing exams for my personal achievement.
In order to change the community, knowledge must be taken and implemented, and the University of Pennsylvania offers many opportunities to do so. The Vagelos Program in Life Sciences & Management bridges the divide between two seemingly unrelated fields and empowers students to bring pharmaceuticals and health care to those in need. I am eager that the program will both enrich my leadership skills and allow me to research proteins and diseases, the two areas which intrigue me. With this knowledge, I wish to become involved in the Social Impact Consulting group and work with organizations in Philadelphia by developing feasible strategies to meet goals. Whether it is with the homeless or an urban museum, the impact made will be tangible and have lasting effects on the community. I also hope to become a member of Medical Emergency Response Team and provide immediate medical care to students and Philadelphians, no matter the time of day. I am motivated to join for the possible patient interactions as well as for the experience in emergency medicine gained.
As I grimace at the chalk stains and chase the little girl, I can't help thinking that despite the long hours of missions training and pricey train tickets, the trouble was all worth it.
Do I make the paths I want to pursue clear, and do I back these up with my personal experiences?
Should I elaborate anywhere?
Thanks for your time and help :)