Well, first of all , Happy New Year guys
I have been stuck with my application with Uchicago for a while,
and i just want you guys to take a look , and spot for grammatical errors please
I will return the favor :)
Thanks
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To be honest, there was no time at all before I lost my heart to the University of Chicago. However, as many optimists may say: "True love might come at first-sight".
I was not even informed of this University before the admission office sent the emails to me. As I remember, it was a message about some silly 50-foot robot. Back then, I had a very blur image of what this university, not to mention the blank page about its library. It took me a few glances into the mail, and I was snapped out of my day dreaming. "What ? A robot ? A giant robot ? Wait, that is so not silly ? How cool is that?". I was raised up in the blooming ages of technology, and my childhood was bonded to the images of transforming robots from outside the universe, so the first thing I would ever dream of, is such amazing library that equipped you with so advanced technology that cures one from boredom. It was a lightning, which sparkled up my ambition to get in this university.
Please do not judge me as shallow or juvenile, but the affection for this university grows daily. I was totally mesmerized by many exciting extended essay questions, and same as any lovers, I spent my days and nights struggling for the perfect answer. It was both a feeling of nervous, mixed with excitement, when I imagine how my application would be perceived. Day after day, I was even more thrilled about the school. It has great such great appearance, as it gives such wonderful feeling by the combination of gothic designs and high-tech appliances. I was overwhelming with the remarkable people who graduated from the university, from the pioneer of loop quantum gravity such as professor Abhay Ashtekar, to the hilarious writer Hayden Schlossberg, who directed many of the funniest movies. A chill ran through my spine when I visualize the picture in which many students in my future school will be such fascinating people. Witty minds, with wry humor.
I would be involved in so many great things in this university. I would love the chances to experience the terrific Core. There is so much to learn in such extensive fields. I can see this as a chance for me to connect to an outside world, to be introduced to new boundaries, instead of being caged in a restricted area of knowledge. If given the opportunity, I would definitely make use of the Academic Advising System, to fully extend my abilities in a studious way.
I believe university is a place where one is explored and educated, not to be trained or tamed. Since my feeling for you, University of Chicago, is so vigorous, I believe my expectations will be fully fulfilled.
I have been stuck with my application with Uchicago for a while,
and i just want you guys to take a look , and spot for grammatical errors please
I will return the favor :)
Thanks
-----------------
To be honest, there was no time at all before I lost my heart to the University of Chicago. However, as many optimists may say: "True love might come at first-sight".
I was not even informed of this University before the admission office sent the emails to me. As I remember, it was a message about some silly 50-foot robot. Back then, I had a very blur image of what this university, not to mention the blank page about its library. It took me a few glances into the mail, and I was snapped out of my day dreaming. "What ? A robot ? A giant robot ? Wait, that is so not silly ? How cool is that?". I was raised up in the blooming ages of technology, and my childhood was bonded to the images of transforming robots from outside the universe, so the first thing I would ever dream of, is such amazing library that equipped you with so advanced technology that cures one from boredom. It was a lightning, which sparkled up my ambition to get in this university.
Please do not judge me as shallow or juvenile, but the affection for this university grows daily. I was totally mesmerized by many exciting extended essay questions, and same as any lovers, I spent my days and nights struggling for the perfect answer. It was both a feeling of nervous, mixed with excitement, when I imagine how my application would be perceived. Day after day, I was even more thrilled about the school. It has great such great appearance, as it gives such wonderful feeling by the combination of gothic designs and high-tech appliances. I was overwhelming with the remarkable people who graduated from the university, from the pioneer of loop quantum gravity such as professor Abhay Ashtekar, to the hilarious writer Hayden Schlossberg, who directed many of the funniest movies. A chill ran through my spine when I visualize the picture in which many students in my future school will be such fascinating people. Witty minds, with wry humor.
I would be involved in so many great things in this university. I would love the chances to experience the terrific Core. There is so much to learn in such extensive fields. I can see this as a chance for me to connect to an outside world, to be introduced to new boundaries, instead of being caged in a restricted area of knowledge. If given the opportunity, I would definitely make use of the Academic Advising System, to fully extend my abilities in a studious way.
I believe university is a place where one is explored and educated, not to be trained or tamed. Since my feeling for you, University of Chicago, is so vigorous, I believe my expectations will be fully fulfilled.
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