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Charity Fund and Orphanage Volunteering - Common Application Short Answer



mike2010 1 / 1  
Oct 22, 2011   #1
Instructions: Please elaborate briefly on your extracurricular activities or work experience.

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In the soft music, with eyes brimming with tears, we hugged each other like old friends. Suddenly, the memories of the 3-year volunteering at the orphanage were like mirages flickering before my eyes. I saw a little girl smiling after her cleft lips surgeon; I saw a little boy enjoying the Shanghai Expo while sitting in a new armchair; and I saw us volunteers like leprechauns flying to the pot of gold over the rainbow in the St. Patrick's Day fundraiser.

Yet I didn't want the wonderful time we spent together to end with my graduation. So, I established the "XXX Charity Fund" in XXX with profits from my company. The fund is a dandelion of love, growing in the soils of my beloved land. Even if I am thousands of miles away in the future, I'll still water it with love. The dandelion's seeds will fly in every direction in the soft breeze. I wish the people who benefit from the fund would plant another dandelion; I wish the flowers of charity would flourish in the society.

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Please kindly provide any comment about grammar, style or content of this short answer.
Your help is much appreciated. ^-^

AzharyN1 - / 6  
Oct 22, 2011   #2
very nice metaphors, and style, one thing u can do is maybe answer the question a bit more. Elaborate on what you did during your volunteer time, list some of the main things you used to do.

Good luck:D
OP mike2010 1 / 1  
Oct 22, 2011   #3
any other opinion?
kyapkyap 2 / 2  
Oct 23, 2011   #4
more details about what you did.


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