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Charity work in Nicaragua; Princeton Supp/ Event or Experience


bigpapi 3 / 9 1  
Dec 26, 2012   #1
hey guys, so for the Princeton Essay with the below prompt:

Option 2 - Using the statement below as a starting point, tell us about an event or experience that helped you define one of your values or changed how you approach the world.

"Princeton in the Nation's Service" was the title of a speech given by Woodrow Wilson on the 150th anniversary of the University. It became the unofficial Princeton motto and was expanded for the University's 250th anniversary to "Princeton in the nation's service and in the service of all nations."

I was thinking about writing about an experience I had freshman year. I got involved with some rk with an impoverished school in Nicaragua and ended up organizing a few benefit concerts with my band that raised enough money to donate a library and a bunch of school supplies. Basically, I was going to write about how the experience changed my view of learning, and how people in the US kind of take for granted what these students would give anything to have and how that experience helped me to show that learning was, not to be cliched, but the "greatest gift of all". However, my main point is that since that Freshman year I have used computer science in my school to help teach others and have even created a few websites to help the students of my school to learn different concepts. My main question is whether I should include this part in the essay. Helping others to learn using computers is a big goal for me throughout college and I think my extracurriculars really show that and I am very passionate about it. Also, I feel like the essay would be somewhat lacking if I didn't mention that at least a little. The only problem is I will also be submitting the BSE engineering essay that asks me to elaborate on my interests in Computer Science. would it not be good to write about my interests in both essays? Or would it be good to use the first essay as the experience that influenced my interests and explain more in depth my interests in the CS essay? Let me know what your thoughts are on my topic and how I can go about combining the two essays together in an effective way

Thanks!
Millin Gabani 10 / 22 1  
Dec 27, 2012   #2
Try to mention the help of your towards the other students in charity essay
and you passion about computer in BSE essay. It is okay to mention something in a essay that you have detailed about in other essay but never write same sentence in both essays. and never detail same idea in both essay.

Looking forward to check your essay
OP bigpapi 3 / 9 1  
Dec 27, 2012   #3
thank you for the advice! that was what I was thinking too. when you say not to repeat the same idea, what do you mean by that? one thing that I was hoping to talk about in the Service essay was how I have made different computer applications to help students learn things like projectile motion and stuff like that. do you think that would be better in the computer essay? or that essay in service that is showing my passion for helping others to learn?


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