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'Chemistry' + 'Ivy League' + 'Math and science' - Columbia



mohamed459 9 / 27  
Dec 26, 2011   #1
Hi. These are my supplements for Columbia U. Feedback appreciated. Thank you in advance

Please tell us what academic class has been your favorite

Throughout my high school years, I've enjoyed many classes but I found Chemistry to be extremely interesting. I liked Chemistry a lot because I found it to be an even combination of math and Science. Biology involves too much science and physics involves too much math, but for Chemistry you need to be good at both. That makes the subject more challenging, and I usually like a good challenge. Also I liked the various concepts in Chemistry and how it showed me how many things in the world operate. Whether it is nuclear reactions, chemical reactions, types of bonds, the study acids and bases, or one of the many concepts of chemistry, I enjoyed the subject a lot. The concept that intrigued me most however was that of equivalent exchange. A person can't create something from nothing. Both sides of a chemical reaction MUST be equal in charge, energy, and mass. No exceptions. This rule is interesting in that it also applies to our everyday life. You can't move forward by just being stagnant. You have to expend energy in order to become successful. That rule is a rule that can't be broken and it can be applied in so many ways. That is what makes it interesting. Lastly I found chemistry to be interesting due to the labs that come with it. Though we didn't do many labs, I found that the chemistry labs were more interesting than those of Biology and physics.

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why.

There are many reasons that I want to go to Columbia, but what I find most appealing about it is that it is an ivy school located in New York. Being any Ivy League school, Columbia University is thus highly respected and is considered one of top schools in the nation. I'd like to get educated at a university like that because I would be exposed to challenging courses. This in turn will help me prepare for a future career in medicine. Medical school is not easy, and if I want to get through it, I'll need a top-notch education. Also since Columbia is a highly respected school, it also consists of a highly respected community. If I go to Columbia, my peers will all be people who have worked extremely hard. They are people with high aspirations. Having peers like that will encourage me to try my hardest in order to achieve my goals. Lastly, I love the location that Columbia is in. Being situated in New York City, I wouldn't have to leave the city atmosphere I always loved. I wouldn't have to leave my family and friends in New York, and at the same time, I would be receiving a top-quality education at an Ivy League school. Definitely this is a package that is extremely appealing to me.

For applicants to Columbia College, please tell us what attracts you specifically to the field or fields of study that you noted in the Application Data section. If you are currently undecided, please write about any field or fields in which you may have interest at this time, but have not yet selected as a major interest.

The fields of study that I chose are my primary choices due to my affinity for math and science. Since I was young, I would always like to solve problems, especially those that were difficult. I'd solve riddles and brain teasers that my dad would give me in order to help me think more critically. I liked the feeling I'd get after solving a challenging problem or riddle. To me, math and science entail a lot of problem solving, and I loved all the math and sciences classes that I had during high school. This is why I chose those fields of interest. I especially chose pre-med as my first choice because it would help me get a career in medicine, which is all about problem solving. A doctor sees patients who are ailing or in need of medical help, and it is up to the doctor to treat their patient's medical problems. Doctors are presented with new cases everyday, and it is up too them to find solutions and methods to enhance treatment. Whether it is cancer or a small fever, doctors are always there to provide treatment to their patients. They are the problem solvers that can make a huge difference in one's life. It's a career that interests me and at the same time I get to help others. That is why I'd like to become a doctor, and a pre-med field study will help me get there.

Please tell us what you found meaningful about one of the above mentioned books, publications or cultural events

The idea of sacrificing a chance at wealth in order to keep your respect and honor is one that is intriguing to me. This is exactly what happens in the play, "A Raisin in the Sun" by Lorainne Hansberry. The protagonist, Walter Younger, is an African American man who lives in poverty and is desperate for wealth. .Walter is eventually able to get some money and he gives the money to his partner in order to open up the wine store. Walter is in euphoria because he believes this is his big chance at becoming wealth. His partner deceives him though and runs away with the money. This turn of events leaves the Younger family saddened, but Walter is given a chance to make up for this loss. He is offered a sum of money with the condition that he moves out of the white neighborhood he lives in. His white neighbors are not thrilled about the idea that their neighbors are African Americans, and they want them out. At first, Walter is about to take the offer but he decides not to. He decides to keep his honor and pride, and he rejects the offer. In my point of view, this is what it means to be a true man. It is to be faced with a tough situation and still not take the disgraceful way out. This intrigues me because it shows to me that some people are capable of thinking about morals and honor even in the toughest of situations. This is important to me because I believe that what a person does is what truly defines him, and protecting honor is a good definition in my opinion.

Erica Htet 2 / 8  
Dec 27, 2011   #2
Throughout my high school years, I've enjoyed many classes but I found Chemistry to be extremely interesting .
I liked Chemistry a lot because I found it to be an even combination of math and Science. Biology involves too much science and physics involves too much math, but for Chemistry you need to be good at both.

That makes the subject more challenging , and I usually like a good challenge .
Also I liked the various concepts in Chemistry and how it showed me how many things in the world operate.
Whether it is nuclear reactions, chemical reactions, types of bonds, the study acids and bases, or one of the many concepts of chemistry, I enjoyed the subject a lot.

The concept that intrigued me most however was that of equivalent exchange.
A person can't create something from nothing.
Both sides of a chemical reaction MUST be equal in charge, energy, and mass.
No exceptions.
This rule is interesting in that it also applies to our everyday life.
You can't move forward by just being stagnant.
You have to expend energy in order to become successful.
That rule is a rule that can't be broken and it can be applied in so many ways.
That is what makes it interesting .
Lastly I found chemistry to be interesting due to the labs that come with it.
Though we didn't do many labs, I found that the chemistry labs were more interesting than those of Biology and physics.

You use the word "interesting" too much. I think you should vary your vocabulary to make your writing more attractive. Repetition is a vice in college admission essays.

To be frank, I think your response will not be very impressive for a university like Columbia. You need to use every opportunity that you have to impress the admission office for get into an Ivy League Institution. Still, you have got time to revise your writing. Wish you the best of luck with your college applications.
OP mohamed459 9 / 27  
Dec 27, 2011   #3
So do you think I should I should vary my vocabulary or change it completely? Also any opinions about the other supplements?
Erica Htet 2 / 8  
Dec 28, 2011   #4
There are many reasons that I want to go to Columbia, but what I find most appealing about it is that it is an ivy school located in New York. Being any Ivy League school, Columbia University is thus highly respected and is considered one of top schools in the nation. I'd like to get educated at a university like that because I would be exposed to challenging courses. This in turn will help me prepare for a future career in medicine. Medical school is not easy, and if I want to get through it, I'll need a top-notch education. Also since Columbia is a highly respected school, it also consists of a highly respected community. If I go to Columbia, my peers will all be people who have worked extremely hard. They are people with high aspirations. Having peers like that will encourage me to try my hardest in order to achieve my goals. Lastly, I love the location that Columbia is in. Being situated in New York City, I wouldn't have to leave the city atmosphere I always loved. I wouldn't have to leave my family and friends in New York, and at the same time, I would be receiving a top-quality education at an Ivy League school. Definitely this is a package that is extremely appealing to me.

You use highly respected three times.
I think you should better the organization and word choice in this response too. Try to revise it again. In addition, I think you should include "Columbia-specific" details in your response.
OP mohamed459 9 / 27  
Dec 28, 2011   #5
Thanks I'll try to put synonyms for the words I repeated alot. Any more comments about strutcture or the answer as a whole. I'm submitting this tonight and would appreciate any constructive criticsm. Thank you in advance


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