CHESS PLAYER; U MICH COMMON APP; Community I belong

Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

I am an enthusiastic chess player, which involves a sport that is not very popular -especially among girls. Aside from my home, the place where I feel most at welcome is my local city chess club. At first, my mom worried with me being constantly surrounded by men, but her mind eased when she saw how easily they accepted me. I think our success as a competitive club has to do with the fact that we support and help each other in every way we can. We treat each other with respect and tolerance. As any other normal family, we sometimes have our differences, nonetheless, we are able to talk through them as well as agree on a solution.

Some of us have had the delightful experience of competing in international tournaments, representing our Island and traveling to different countries, meeting new people and cultures. Just recently, I went along a group of twelve other young chess players to compete for the first time in the World Youth Chess Championship in Maribor, Slovenia. As the oldest and more experienced player, amid my delegation, I was unintentionally given the role of advocate and supporter. I encouraged my teammates to always give their best and not feel beaten up if they lost because those were the games of which we learned the most. As U.S. Chess National Master and author Dan Heisman says, "Don't be afraid of losing; be afraid of playing a game and not learning something."

PD: English is not my first language. Please anything is helpful at this point. Deadline is today. Thanks in advance! :)

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Some of us have had the delightful experience of competing in international tournaments, representing our Island and traveling to different countries, meeting new people and cultures. Just recently, I went alongwas part of a group of twelve other young chess players to compete for the first time in the World Youth Chess Championship in Maribor, Slovenia. As there wereoldestolder and more experienced players , amid my delegation, I was unintentionally given the role of an advocate and a supporter. I encouraged my teammates to always give their best and not feel beaten up if they lost because those were the games of which we learned the most. As U.S. Chess National Master and author Dan Heisman says, "Don't be afraid of losing; be afraid of playing a game and not learning something."

Great story but u have to work on the English. I tried correcting but please get it seen from an English Educator.

And please go through my essay too.

Thanks for your help! Much appreciated :)

This is fine. But I feel you can add more emotions to this. Show them that you are passionate about chess and chess is an integral part of your life :)

My suggestion;
For me, chess is part of my life. However, many people perceive chess players are nerds. ....now tell them the challenges you faced with changing such perceptions and having acceptance by others. Tell them how you overcame such challenges :)