I am currently applying to University of Wisconsin. Please help me to improve my statement. Thank you very much.
The University values an educational environment that provides all members of the campus community with opportunities to grow and develop intellectually, personally, culturally and socially. In order to give us a more complete picture of you as an individual, please tell us about the particular life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments and/or interests you will bring to our campus. In other words, how will your presence enrich our community?
I strongly believe that we all should always do something to make our earth to be better and better. Deforestation, pollution and global warming are the terms that I heard over again and again since I was a child. As I grew up, the situation seemed to become worsen. In fact, I believe that the fate of the earth is rested in our hand. Therefore, it is our best interest to contribute our efforts in a way to reduce these negative impacts and prevent the exacerbation of our earth. I have a dream to be great and responsible civil engineer. Through things like amelioration of development project, providing people residential area with landscaping can let our residents to live without making our earth become sicker. I hope that I can fulfill my dream by enrolling into the University of Wisconsin. I strongly believe that University of Wisconsin as one of the top engineer schools is the place where I can have adequate resource and professional field research to achieve my dream.
I am a Chinese boy who was raised in a small village from Malaysia, a place where is isolated from bustling and flourishing city. It is very common to see people are still living under wooden hut. It had been many times that I saw their wooden huts were being destroyed by the strong wind and flood by the rainstorm again and again. The families, especially the elders and children are suffering and dread under such circumstances. I know something has to be done in order to change it. It is my responsibility as a civil engineering to provide them a better place for living.
I believe that to be a successful civil engineer, leadership should be considered as one of most important qualities that civil engineer must equip. Therefore, I always participate and organize activities to improve my leadership skills. When I was in my high school, I had consigned with both Presidents of Mathematics Society and Co-curriculum Coordinating Board in 2007. Co-curriculum Coordinating Board is a board that is formed by all the presidents and vice presidents. To me, it is a very valuable to have the experience to lead all the presidents in my school. Besides that, I was also the organizing chairperson to organize various major activities such as Teachers' Day and Leadership Training camp. If I have the opportunity to attend University of Wisconsin, I trust that I will continue to work harder and help to maintain and improve the high standard of the university. I also hope that I will have the chance to share my experiences, values and interest with others in the university.
The University values an educational environment that provides all members of the campus community with opportunities to grow and develop intellectually, personally, culturally and socially. In order to give us a more complete picture of you as an individual, please tell us about the particular life experiences, perspectives, talents, commitments and/or interests you will bring to our campus. In other words, how will your presence enrich our community?
I strongly believe that we all should always do something to make our earth to be better and better. Deforestation, pollution and global warming are the terms that I heard over again and again since I was a child. As I grew up, the situation seemed to become worsen. In fact, I believe that the fate of the earth is rested in our hand. Therefore, it is our best interest to contribute our efforts in a way to reduce these negative impacts and prevent the exacerbation of our earth. I have a dream to be great and responsible civil engineer. Through things like amelioration of development project, providing people residential area with landscaping can let our residents to live without making our earth become sicker. I hope that I can fulfill my dream by enrolling into the University of Wisconsin. I strongly believe that University of Wisconsin as one of the top engineer schools is the place where I can have adequate resource and professional field research to achieve my dream.
I am a Chinese boy who was raised in a small village from Malaysia, a place where is isolated from bustling and flourishing city. It is very common to see people are still living under wooden hut. It had been many times that I saw their wooden huts were being destroyed by the strong wind and flood by the rainstorm again and again. The families, especially the elders and children are suffering and dread under such circumstances. I know something has to be done in order to change it. It is my responsibility as a civil engineering to provide them a better place for living.
I believe that to be a successful civil engineer, leadership should be considered as one of most important qualities that civil engineer must equip. Therefore, I always participate and organize activities to improve my leadership skills. When I was in my high school, I had consigned with both Presidents of Mathematics Society and Co-curriculum Coordinating Board in 2007. Co-curriculum Coordinating Board is a board that is formed by all the presidents and vice presidents. To me, it is a very valuable to have the experience to lead all the presidents in my school. Besides that, I was also the organizing chairperson to organize various major activities such as Teachers' Day and Leadership Training camp. If I have the opportunity to attend University of Wisconsin, I trust that I will continue to work harder and help to maintain and improve the high standard of the university. I also hope that I will have the chance to share my experiences, values and interest with others in the university.
