Hello, this is my response for one of Stanford's short essay prompts. I'm not grammar's best friend, so feel free to correct me. Also, my response it 80 characters more than it should be, so please let me know where I can cut. Do you think it is a little boring or needs a little more insight of what I think about traveling? There is not a lot of space and I don't know how to fit information. so many thanks in advance.
Here it is:
As I look around my room,the magnets on my white board from all the different places that I have visited are what first catch my attention.Each of my trips opens my imagination to a whole new world of beautiful memories,life lessons,and great experiences;that's when I know how much traveling matters to me.
Although I have started traveling when I was 40 days old,my motivation to visit every inch of my country was sparked as I first visited the palace of Iran's first king,constructed about 7000 years ago.While growing up as an adventurer who sought to explore her history and culture,I began to sense my profound passion for enhancing my personality as well as deepening my knowledge.While visiting the city of Napa,I encountered the Darioush Winery,a small area dedicated to Darioush's palace in Iran.Seeing the glorifying yet burnt palace reconstructed in America touched my heart, made me believe that every inch of the universe is my home, and fortified me to expand the knowledge of my community about Iran by becoming a member of Culture Club.
Traveling has also been the best friend who gave me the greatest life lessons.While staring at the dusty stars on the ground of Holleywood,I learned that it is only people's memories that remain forever.I decided to work hard for my dreams,be the most successful in my subject,and leave a valuable and eternal legacy for my community.I have been able to learn life lessons from unpleasant trips as well.The most prominent example is when I almost faced death for being stuck in a car that was covered with 10 feet of snow for 48 hours.After surviving this natural disaster,I learned that the future is unpredictable;thus I began to count every second of my life as a precious treasure that I must take good care of and enjoy.
As a citizen of Earth, I believe in Robert Stevenson's quote that says: "There are no foreign lands.It is the traveler only who is foreign." I cannot wait to discover my planet while visiting the fascinating pyramids in Egypt, the beautiful Venice,the devouring,wild adventure in Africa,and the exciting London Eye ride.
Here it is:
As I look around my room,the magnets on my white board from all the different places that I have visited are what first catch my attention.Each of my trips opens my imagination to a whole new world of beautiful memories,life lessons,and great experiences;that's when I know how much traveling matters to me.
Although I have started traveling when I was 40 days old,my motivation to visit every inch of my country was sparked as I first visited the palace of Iran's first king,constructed about 7000 years ago.While growing up as an adventurer who sought to explore her history and culture,I began to sense my profound passion for enhancing my personality as well as deepening my knowledge.While visiting the city of Napa,I encountered the Darioush Winery,a small area dedicated to Darioush's palace in Iran.Seeing the glorifying yet burnt palace reconstructed in America touched my heart, made me believe that every inch of the universe is my home, and fortified me to expand the knowledge of my community about Iran by becoming a member of Culture Club.
Traveling has also been the best friend who gave me the greatest life lessons.While staring at the dusty stars on the ground of Holleywood,I learned that it is only people's memories that remain forever.I decided to work hard for my dreams,be the most successful in my subject,and leave a valuable and eternal legacy for my community.I have been able to learn life lessons from unpleasant trips as well.The most prominent example is when I almost faced death for being stuck in a car that was covered with 10 feet of snow for 48 hours.After surviving this natural disaster,I learned that the future is unpredictable;thus I began to count every second of my life as a precious treasure that I must take good care of and enjoy.
As a citizen of Earth, I believe in Robert Stevenson's quote that says: "There are no foreign lands.It is the traveler only who is foreign." I cannot wait to discover my planet while visiting the fascinating pyramids in Egypt, the beautiful Venice,the devouring,wild adventure in Africa,and the exciting London Eye ride.