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City life/ Architecture/ Diverse culture; How UChicago satisfy my desires



mercedes1923 4 / 8  
Jan 7, 2013   #1
Okay, I am majorily freaking out right now. I was going to apply to U of C but then I my computer crashed and ALL of my work got deleted!!! THE HORROR! Anyways, needless to say, I missed their application deadline. (Thus, making me combust, rise from my ashes and then sob uncontrollably in a corner with a tub of ice cream.) But then a MIRACLE OCCURED! They extended my deadline to the 10th of January!!!! Now I am currently sobbing with happiness, but I only have a little bit of time to turn in their application. I need advice on this.

Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago

My answer:

I do not recall my first word or my years in primary school, yet I remember the feel of wax crayons in my hands and the smell of finger paint in the stagnant air. I cannot tell you where I lived seven years ago or when I learned how to swim, but I can vividly describe the first painting I gazed at and how at that moment, I fell in love with the ambiguous concept called art. As years blended, art has always been at the forefront of my happiest moments in life. Maybe it was fate, maybe it circumstance or maybe it was something bigger than me that I began to consider art as a serious career. Whatever the case, I decided to pursue my love of the Fine Arts with fiery ambition.

Choosing the University of Chicago to possible become my home, in my ideology, is the perfect decision. Situated in a city that possesses such inimitable architecture and diverse cultures will broaden both my intellectual and more importantly, artistic horizon. At UChicago, I have the opportunity to expand and hone my skills and put my talents and knowledge into practice. For me, nothing can be compared to that thrilling experience.

Should I add more or is less more????? They did not give me a word limit and IDK what is appropriate!!! Help me!

Kitsumi 4 / 97  
Jan 7, 2013   #2
What is so different about UC though? I mean, there must be other colleges in Chicago, why specifically UC? If I replace UC with the name of another college in Chicago, will the essay still be understandable? If so, then you need to do some more research about WHY UC fits you.

Also, what is it that you hope to do in the future? And how will UC help you accomplish that goal?
admission2012 - / 475  
Jan 7, 2013   #3
Hello,

This question went over your head. The prompt cleared asked how does the U of C satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning. This was the main question here. It forces you to research the university and its methods of teaching. Once identified, you need to explain how this type of teaching is beneficial to the type of learner you are. -AAO

Hope this helps
Th25cc 2 / 90  
Jan 7, 2013   #4
Why is UC the best college for you to explore your love of fine arts? All you have established is what you are going to be able to do at UC. Include some information about what sets University of Chicago apart from others.

There were a few issues with grammar in your essay. "Possible" should become "possibly". The grammatical errors are fairly minor - what you should focus on is expanding your ideas to include a discussion of why the school and community is the best for you. What sets it apart. You can talk about UC a bit more than yourself.
Quinchonez 2 / 6  
Jan 7, 2013   #5
you need more talk more about yourself and why they should accept you there and also about the art aspect like you did. just expand it more


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