coffee -- Note to your Roommate -- Stanford essay question

Here is my attempt at the room mate question. Please tear apart as you wish!

Thanks in advance :)

"Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate-and us-know you better"

I love coffee. I love it in nearly any form, from the simple Americano to the more complex Café Breva; from the classic Cappuccino to the infamous Hammerhead.

But don't think of me as your typical caffeine junkie! I find it almost scandalous when people say coffee is simply to provide energy for those lethargic mornings and tiring all-nighters. To me, coffee serves as a respite from a rather hectic life. I maintain one of the busiest schedules I know of. Between running from class to class, preparing the agenda for my charitable organizations group to editing articles for my science magazine, there never seems to be a moment of peace.

Coffee offers some sanity in a rather frenetic life. It gives me a brief moment where I can just kick back and smell the delicious scent of the mocha in my hands, without worrying about any upcoming deadlines or pending projects. It serves as a relief, and even gives me a different outlook of the world. Even a person's personality can be likened to coffee. A man of simplicity and curtness is a simple drip brew, a black coffee with no milk; a brew that gets things done with minimal fuss. The quirky people would be eccentric Espresso Con Pannas, with an exciting whipped cream flavor dominating their personalities. I suppose I would regard myself as a Ristretto, an initially intense brew, but not unpleasant to the taste. I like an undiluted raw version of life, with all its unusual mixes of flavors and aromas.

I look forward to meeting you and finding out your particular flavor. Regardless of what it is, I am certain we will blend together well. As long as you aren't a Frappe of course - I simply abhor Frappes!

Complicated isn't the right word there. I'd go for something like complex or rich


This sentence could be better, more on the lines of "But I'm not your typical caffeine junkie"

Merge paragraphs 2 and 3, as well as 4 and 5



...and then you contradict yourself marvelously.

Well, its certainly you... lets see how the admin guys like it, eh?

Haha, i love the "caffeine junkie" bit". Here it is again, albeit slightly edited.

Funny! I like the idea :D

Read mine ?

its great and fresh i like the idea

Very original. Great essay and good luck getting into Stanford. I have to do something similar to this when i apply to Babson

Very creative. Should give admission officers comic relief when considering applicants.