'cold weather and historical background' - Boston University Supplement

Prompt: Why is BU a good fit for you?

"We Dare You." Upon receiving a forty eight page booklet of Boston University covered with this phrase and my favorite color, I couldn't help to open it. Slowly reading every page, I had a clear overview of the pursuits, campus life, and current work the school was doing. Flipping through the pages a decision was made. Each fact and informative footnote on the sides of the pages accured a straight forward message that was adhering to my name. Especially since the passion i plan on pursuing in college is exactly what one student experienced by going to Peru. She saw "firsthand the struggles and resiliency of the Peruvian people (page 21)." Boston University focuses on using the world as a classroom setting, because we learn so much more from being exposed to reality then reading it in a book.

I believe this university fits me to a T, from the cold weather to its historical background and th big city lights. I'm ready to take the dare and venture off to a city where things are done to change the world. What more can I say? I even took the , "Will I like it here?" quiz and scored one hundred points! It's pretty simple, I know I will be molded into a great leader in becoming a Boston Terrier.

this is great! for the quote, put the citation outside the quotation marks like this, "...Peruvian people," (page 21).
Also the next sentence starts off by saying, that BU focuses then you change the subject. Maybe say Boston University focuses on using the world as a classroom setting because they believe that students learn more from being exposed to reality then than from reading it in a book.

I think you can go into more detail, have you visited the campus? have you talked to any professors? those small things will give you huge bonus points in your essay.

I like how you used the BU booklet as the basis for your essay! It's a creative approach. You have some really good concrete examples, but focus even more on why it's a good fit for you. You listed a lot of reason why it's a good school, but how do these specific factors relate to you and your goals? Good luck :)

Thank You I'll show more examples!