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Prompt:How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.
Three. That was the age I started reading and learning my multiplication facts. Eight. Everyone always would refer to me as the Doctor. Twelve. I joined National Junior Honor Society and started my Community Service. Fourteen. I considered taking up a career in medicine. Seventeen. Specifically, I became interested in oncology. Eighteen. Blank.
The University of Chicago is the ultimate destination at which I can fulfill my wishes of continuing my education and community service and taking the steps to my career goals by pursuing my interests. The University has a reputation of tending to its undergraduates by creating the Core, which is a program that would keep me organized and in line, not only with academics, but with my future goals and interests. Also, its language requirement for undergraduates will quench my thirst of language learning. Its standing is also derived from its prestigious faculty, which I hope will inspire me to be introduced into a whole new world of learning and thinking. In terms of community, the U of C expands from Chicago to the US to every corner of the globe. Its 250+ clubs and organizations, such as El Club de Espanol, the Pre-Med Students Association, and the Alpha Phi Omega, allow me to connect socially with others with the same interests, to better assimilate into the U of C society, and to continue on with community service. Participating in sports, such as basketball, cross country, and swimming, will help me develop a sense of teamwork, sportsmanship, and character. The campus also demonstrates its unity and diversity through events such as the cultural shows and PanAsia, which could elicit in me an appreciation and an embracement of other cultures. The University of Chicago displays a vibrant school spirit that encourages extreme loyalty and allegiance that I would want to provide to the institute. Overall, the university conveys an important message: college is not another dull place, but yet a place where a new life begins; a new life that I would want to be a part of. Eighteen? The University of Chicago.
Prompt:How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.
Three. That was the age I started reading and learning my multiplication facts. Eight. Everyone always would refer to me as the Doctor. Twelve. I joined National Junior Honor Society and started my Community Service. Fourteen. I considered taking up a career in medicine. Seventeen. Specifically, I became interested in oncology. Eighteen. Blank.
The University of Chicago is the ultimate destination at which I can fulfill my wishes of continuing my education and community service and taking the steps to my career goals by pursuing my interests. The University has a reputation of tending to its undergraduates by creating the Core, which is a program that would keep me organized and in line, not only with academics, but with my future goals and interests. Also, its language requirement for undergraduates will quench my thirst of language learning. Its standing is also derived from its prestigious faculty, which I hope will inspire me to be introduced into a whole new world of learning and thinking. In terms of community, the U of C expands from Chicago to the US to every corner of the globe. Its 250+ clubs and organizations, such as El Club de Espanol, the Pre-Med Students Association, and the Alpha Phi Omega, allow me to connect socially with others with the same interests, to better assimilate into the U of C society, and to continue on with community service. Participating in sports, such as basketball, cross country, and swimming, will help me develop a sense of teamwork, sportsmanship, and character. The campus also demonstrates its unity and diversity through events such as the cultural shows and PanAsia, which could elicit in me an appreciation and an embracement of other cultures. The University of Chicago displays a vibrant school spirit that encourages extreme loyalty and allegiance that I would want to provide to the institute. Overall, the university conveys an important message: college is not another dull place, but yet a place where a new life begins; a new life that I would want to be a part of. Eighteen? The University of Chicago.