Hi everyone, I'm a bit unsure with this essay (I've worked with it for a few days). Could anyone make suggestions (this time not with length anymore)?
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.
Limit: 2000 characters
My essay: 1849 characters
Dear Roommate,
I often link myself with colors, and my letters are often filled with words in different inks. Unfortunately, I have no way to do that using Stanford online submission system. Anyway, can you pretend that I'm writing this note in my usual way?
- Black: I advise you always to turn on the light before coming to our room. Otherwise, you may get hit from me, a person who likes dancing in darkness and does all sort of weird movements.
- Blue: My favorite color, and surely I'll fill our room with blue. You'll see me with packs of blue stuff, from stuffed animals to chessboard. Most of which aren't blue originally, but my penchant for this color is so overwhelming that I repainted all.
- White: (hmm, how can I write in white ink? Anyway, I assume it's possible) my most unstable color. No no, don't worry that I'll scribble on your beautiful wall. What I mean is that I rapidly fill plain white pages with words and diagrams. I often write without a definite schedule and plan: the previous day I wrote about a trip in Greece, the next day I may write where my love for math comes from (spoiler: it comes from a box full of stones).
- Yellow: Upon seeing this color, you may scream: "What? Another Asian stereotype and math craziness?" Don't worry. True, there are times I need to be recluse to solve complicated math problems. But usually, you'll see me doing math with a box full of cards, dices and chess pieces. Is that math after all? Yes, it's the so-called Discrete Mathematics, the one that will help you when to bet on casino or how to schedule our hectic lives. I enjoy doing such math and always eager to demonstrate my fruits to others, so lucky you to be my first audience.
Is my life limited in just four colors? I hope not. I'm waiting for your note to intensify the diversity of our room's spectrum. See you in Stanford!
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better.
Limit: 2000 characters
My essay: 1849 characters
Dear Roommate,
I often link myself with colors, and my letters are often filled with words in different inks. Unfortunately, I have no way to do that using Stanford online submission system. Anyway, can you pretend that I'm writing this note in my usual way?
- Black: I advise you always to turn on the light before coming to our room. Otherwise, you may get hit from me, a person who likes dancing in darkness and does all sort of weird movements.
- Blue: My favorite color, and surely I'll fill our room with blue. You'll see me with packs of blue stuff, from stuffed animals to chessboard. Most of which aren't blue originally, but my penchant for this color is so overwhelming that I repainted all.
- White: (hmm, how can I write in white ink? Anyway, I assume it's possible) my most unstable color. No no, don't worry that I'll scribble on your beautiful wall. What I mean is that I rapidly fill plain white pages with words and diagrams. I often write without a definite schedule and plan: the previous day I wrote about a trip in Greece, the next day I may write where my love for math comes from (spoiler: it comes from a box full of stones).
- Yellow: Upon seeing this color, you may scream: "What? Another Asian stereotype and math craziness?" Don't worry. True, there are times I need to be recluse to solve complicated math problems. But usually, you'll see me doing math with a box full of cards, dices and chess pieces. Is that math after all? Yes, it's the so-called Discrete Mathematics, the one that will help you when to bet on casino or how to schedule our hectic lives. I enjoy doing such math and always eager to demonstrate my fruits to others, so lucky you to be my first audience.
Is my life limited in just four colors? I hope not. I'm waiting for your note to intensify the diversity of our room's spectrum. See you in Stanford!