Columbia short response (Rigorous, diversified, and accessible)

Here is the prompt for columbia's short answer.

Please tell us what you find most appealing about Columbia and why:

Rigorous, diversified, and accessible are some of the many appealing aspects of Columbia that attacts me. Looking at the curriculum and its organization, I believe that Columbia presents a rigorous challenge to my educational aspirations. In addition Columbia has diversity in its population of students which will enable me to cooperate and interact with a wide range of people. Additionally, the accessibility of Columbia and in the heart of Manhattan draws me more to this school. I think that such qualities in a college will allow me to learn the most I can.

can you please edit my response to see if there is any errors, need for change or incoherence.

Personally, I think it's too vague. You could find everything you listed at every university, except for the Manhattan part.

the response is good but it is too generic. try to add something different. surfsandiego was right..

Rigorous, diversified, and accessible are some of the many appealing aspects of Columbia that attract me.

Looking at the curriculum and its organization, I believe that Columbia presents a welcome challenge to my educational aspirations.

In addition Columbia has diversity in its population of students which will enable me to cooperate with and interact with a wide range of people.

Additionally, the accessibility of Columbia to the heart of Manhattan draws me more to this school. I think that such qualities in a college will allow me to learn the most I can.

You should say something about what you hope to study there!

:)