Comment and explanation section of pffa Princeton

Use the area below to provide additional information you think is relevant to your application for financial aid. For example, you might give more detail about family income or other items from the application, or describe a special circumstance that affects your family's finances. International students should use this section to list the rate used to convert to US dollars.

The rate used in the conversion of Nepali rupee to US dollars is:
$1=Rs.107

My father is the single earner in my family .He was unemployed from October 2013 to May 2015; however, last year he got his job back and contributes around $5600 per annum to the family. He owns a house which yields an annual around $1200 as rent. The amount owed on our home is $20000 on which $300 has to be paid as an annual interest. Additionally, my father owns an agricultural land worth $20000 that raises $1200 per annum.

Since my mother is a depression patient, around $1500 per year is spent in in her regular medical expenses. However, when she gets major attacks we have to admit her in the hospital for months and the cost raises as much as $2500. In 2015, since my father lacked the ability to pay for the tuition, boarding, and plane tickets expenses of my elder brother which required $10000, he had to sell a part of the land we owned. Additionally, each year my parents contribute $2600 annually to pay off the tuition cost of the university in which my brother studies. We maintain our living with the remaining income .Since I had been studying on scholarship for the last two years, my parents were relieved from paying any tuition fee, but now since I have to get an admission in a four year college degree, they are prepared to contribute around $2000 per annum towards my education.

Am I supposed to write this in answer???

This is definitely a well developed response. It shows a clear idea as to the financial status of your family and offers information about how your parents will be paying for your fees and why they can only afford so much. It would help your application for financial aid if you mention how you plan to contribute towards the payment of your own tuition fee as well. You should make mention of any other financial aid applications that you have pending, the chances of you winning the scholarship, and how much that will most likely contribute to paying off the final cost of your education.

With that said, I believe that the additional information will help depict a clearer picture of how dire your need for financial aid is. Once you add the necessary information, we can work on creating the final content. Remember, don't exaggerate your situation, just tell it like it is. Tell the truth because they will ask your parents to submit financial documents in support of your financial aid application.

Hi inav..
because our contributor already gave you suggestion about your content, i will give some corrections according to your writing.

My father is the single earner in my family .He was ...
My father is the only one in my family who have to earn money in order to fulfill our life necessities. in 2012, he can gain money as big a $5600 long the year, but starting from October 2013 until May 2015 he cannot get a job.

Since my mother is a depression patient...
Since my mother got depression we have to spend $1500 for cost of treatment a year.

However(additional information, not contrast) , when she gets got a major attacks we have to admit bring her in the to hospital for several months and the ...

In 2015, since my father lacked the ability to pay for the tuition, ...
2015 is the hardest year for my family where my father unable to pay tuition fee, boarding, and air ticket for my elder brother, thus he had to sell a part of the land we owned

'You should make mention of any other financial aid applications that you have pending, the chances of you winning the scholarship, and how much that will most likely contribute to paying off the final cost of your education. '

I do not have any other financial aid applications pending.......What do I do Holt?

I suggest that you look into some scholarship programs that you can apply to. This will show the financial aid committee that you are proactive in terms of finding ways to finance your education. This is not limited to just financial aid and scholarships. You can also mention that you have some skills that will allow you to secure employment either on campus or off campus once you are legally allowed to work as a student in the country. If you know of any relative who may be willing to help support your education, you should make mention of that as well. You should not rely solely on the financial aid for your educational fees. Neither should that be the sole focus of your aid application. It is important that they know you are a responsible person who will do what it takes to legally finance your education in the country.

Can I add this sentences at last >>
Here, in Kathmandu I work as an A Level tutor in Trinity International College .So, I hope that this work experience might be beneficial in the days to come and will help me to contribute around $500 per annum towards my college fees.

That would be a good response. But it needs to be worded in a better manner. Might I suggest that you use the following paragraph in relation to your personal contribution to your tuition fees instead:

I realize that I can't rely solely on my parents, the goodwill of others, and scholarships to get by in college. I must also do my part in order to pay at least a portion of my fees. After all, I am able and willing to work in order to ensure a better future for myself and my family. I currently work as an A Level tutor at Trinity International College in Kathmandu. I receive a small stipend for my services. It is this stipend that I have been setting aside over the years. At the moment, I believe that my savings will allow me to contribute at least $500 per annum towards my college tuition and miscellaneous fees. I also plan to get a part time job either on or off campus once I am legally cleared to become a working student in the country.

The part about you working part time has to be mentioned so that they will understand that you are more than willing to do your fair share of shouldering our tuition costs while attending college.

[...] At the moment, I believe that my savings will allow meto contribute at least $500 per annum towards my college tuition and miscellaneous fees. I also plan to get a part time job either on or off campus once I am legally cleared to become a working student in the country.

For the red parts, they do not fit ..Help me Holt .. only 2000 characters are allowed
Please check for grammatical and LANGUAGE errors..

These edits will produce a 1975 character count.

... My father i...He was unemployed from October 2013 to May 2015; however, last year he got his job back and contributes ... my father owns an agricultural ...

... year is spent in in ON her regular ... ...and the cost raises RISES TO as much ... $20000 on OF which $300 has to be paid as an REPRESENTS annual interest. In 2015, since my father lacked the ability to pay for the tuition, boarding, and plane tickets expenses of my elder brother which required $10000, he had to sell a part of the land we owned. Additionally , each EACH year my parents contribute $2600 ... annually ... university in WHERE which my brother studies....

Here, in Kathmandu I work as an A Level tutor in AT Trinity International College IN KATHMANDU... on my parents, the goodwill of others, and scholarships... a portion of my fees.

... will allow me tocontribute ...

The rate used in the conversion of Nepali rupee [...]

Is this fine Holt?Do I add any thing more ?? I still have 92 characters left!! :)
Holt I would like you to check my supplement once I have decided to add something .
THANK YOU VERY MUCH HOLT!!

I'd be happy to review your other papers once you post them here. I still have a few small corrections for your essay. After you apply these changes, your essay will be good to go.

...He owns a house which yields an annual around $1200 as rent. RENTS FOR AROUND $1200 A YEAR
However, when she gets major attacks we have to admit her in the hospital for months and the cost rises to WE SPEND as
much as $2500 IN HOSPITALIZATION COSTS PER YEAR.
... Here, in Kathmandu I work as an A Level tutor in Trinity International College (KATHMANDU) .

It will actually be better for you if the statement you present it shorter than the maximum word count. Remember, a longer response does not necessarily it is an informative response. Short but informative responses are most appreciated by reviewers.

The rate used in the conversion of Nepali rupee to US dollars is: $1=Rs.107.

My father is the single earner in my family .He contributes around $5600 per annum to the family. He owns a house which rents for around $1200 a year. Additionally, my father owns agricultural land worth $20000 that raises $1200 per annum. Since my mother is a depression patient, around $1500 per year is spent on her regular medical expenses. However, the cost rises to as much as $2500 in hospitalization costs per year. The amount owed on our home is $20000 of which $300 represents annual interest. Each year my parents contribute $2600 annually to pay off the tuition cost of the university where my brother studies. We maintain our living with the remaining income .Since I had been studying on scholarship for the last two years, my parents were relieved from paying any tuition fee, but now since I have to get an admission in a four year college degree, they are prepared to contribute around $2000 per annum towards my education. I realize that I can't rely solely on my parents, the goodwill of others, and scholarships to get by in college. I must also do my part in order to pay at least a portion of my fees. After all, I am able and willing to work in order to ensure a better future for myself and my family. I currently work as an A Level tutor at Trinity International College in Kathmandu. I receive a small stipend for my services. It is this stipend that I have been setting aside over the years. At the moment, I believe that my savings will allow me to contribute at least $500 per annum towards my college tuition and miscellaneous fees. I also plan to get a part time job either on or off campus once I am legally cleared to become a working student in the country.

So this is my final edited version of pffa section HOLT.Please final check it .
THANK YOU!!