Could someone please read the following essay for content (does it show enough personality), correct usage of words, and mechanics.
Prompt- In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities
Tennis has heavily impacted my life. Picking up a tennis racquet as a freshman in high school, I knew little about the passion that I was going to develop for the sport. All the worries of the world seem to disappear when I step on to the tennis court. Playing on the High school team has just been a part of experience. Tennis has helped me make a lot of friends, while providing me with a competitive environment. I have become a tennis aficionado. Apart from developing a sense of fellowship in the team, tennis has fostered a general sense of camaraderie and sportsmanship in me. Regardless of the outcome of the match, I can always look into my opponent's eyes, with a smile on my face, and shake his hand.
Thanks in advance.
Prompt- In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities
Tennis has heavily impacted my life. Picking up a tennis racquet as a freshman in high school, I knew little about the passion that I was going to develop for the sport. All the worries of the world seem to disappear when I step on to the tennis court. Playing on the High school team has just been a part of experience. Tennis has helped me make a lot of friends, while providing me with a competitive environment. I have become a tennis aficionado. Apart from developing a sense of fellowship in the team, tennis has fostered a general sense of camaraderie and sportsmanship in me. Regardless of the outcome of the match, I can always look into my opponent's eyes, with a smile on my face, and shake his hand.
Thanks in advance.
