Hi, everybody.. I left a little text, and you helped. I really need your help, and any correction of my essay.. Else, I have just 511 words, and i guess a normal lenght must be about 600-800.or is it okay?
This is my essay:
I remember well my childhood which was spent in an urban-type community named Kirovsk. There is a clear air unsoiled by the gas of cars. The weather is warm and not windy in winters, because it is situated in a valley skirted by mountains. I and my brothers often used to buy any kind of sweets in shop; and as I remember, the money given us was enough.
The childhood was passing, and I had to find out my own way for a big life, for a future of mine, for the elaboration of my knowledge and life experience. I entered one of the best schools of Taldykorgan, the school-lyceum number 20; and then a real contestation for knowledge began.
In my opinion, people of the town were more active, more purposeful; every man had his own intention and would not even blink his eyes until he got a result. Noticing all of it, I also tried to be dynamic everywhere, to be patient, to intrude to any company and get into every work.
We are all trying to live change our lives to the best direction, so we must gain more. Nowadays it is getting harder to earn; and lots of vital things are gained with rivalry. Especially now, at the time of World Economic Crisis. The economic crisis is affecting to all countries of the world, as to Kazakhstan and its citizens. It began before now and has brought many challenges.
Staple prices have been increasing from the end of the 2007th year and run up to the drag of 66 percents at a given instant. The government has allocated a sum for 4.5 billion dollars from the National Reserve Foundation to support the condition of the banks. But, grinding difficulties are being suffered by the nation of our republic: salary has been declined; inflation is about 5-7 per cents; the value of daily food has been changed; banks also do not give creedites for small and medium business as much as before; and there are job cuts in big enterprises, factories, combines. For instance, the metallurgical complex of Karagandy reduced 4500 work places. It is a big deprivation for the workers, who have to provide their families in spite of all the troubles. As to any citizen of Kazakhstan, the financial crisis has also got some influences on me. Because of the reduction in salaries of parents and other different reasons the lifestyle of pupils changed: pocket expenses started decreasing; I stopped going to the places like swimming-pools, rinks; the settlement for school is growing and I stop going to additional lessons like math and physics which are very useful for me to pass UNT (Unified National Test).
The government of Kazakhstan is making provision to stabilize the position of its citizens and economic system. But, a lot of countries all over the world have an inferior status than ours, so they need more treatments. It is said that it is just the beginning of the crisis, therefore we must fight against this situation together and help each-other.
This is my essay:
I remember well my childhood which was spent in an urban-type community named Kirovsk. There is a clear air unsoiled by the gas of cars. The weather is warm and not windy in winters, because it is situated in a valley skirted by mountains. I and my brothers often used to buy any kind of sweets in shop; and as I remember, the money given us was enough.
The childhood was passing, and I had to find out my own way for a big life, for a future of mine, for the elaboration of my knowledge and life experience. I entered one of the best schools of Taldykorgan, the school-lyceum number 20; and then a real contestation for knowledge began.
In my opinion, people of the town were more active, more purposeful; every man had his own intention and would not even blink his eyes until he got a result. Noticing all of it, I also tried to be dynamic everywhere, to be patient, to intrude to any company and get into every work.
We are all trying to live change our lives to the best direction, so we must gain more. Nowadays it is getting harder to earn; and lots of vital things are gained with rivalry. Especially now, at the time of World Economic Crisis. The economic crisis is affecting to all countries of the world, as to Kazakhstan and its citizens. It began before now and has brought many challenges.
Staple prices have been increasing from the end of the 2007th year and run up to the drag of 66 percents at a given instant. The government has allocated a sum for 4.5 billion dollars from the National Reserve Foundation to support the condition of the banks. But, grinding difficulties are being suffered by the nation of our republic: salary has been declined; inflation is about 5-7 per cents; the value of daily food has been changed; banks also do not give creedites for small and medium business as much as before; and there are job cuts in big enterprises, factories, combines. For instance, the metallurgical complex of Karagandy reduced 4500 work places. It is a big deprivation for the workers, who have to provide their families in spite of all the troubles. As to any citizen of Kazakhstan, the financial crisis has also got some influences on me. Because of the reduction in salaries of parents and other different reasons the lifestyle of pupils changed: pocket expenses started decreasing; I stopped going to the places like swimming-pools, rinks; the settlement for school is growing and I stop going to additional lessons like math and physics which are very useful for me to pass UNT (Unified National Test).
The government of Kazakhstan is making provision to stabilize the position of its citizens and economic system. But, a lot of countries all over the world have an inferior status than ours, so they need more treatments. It is said that it is just the beginning of the crisis, therefore we must fight against this situation together and help each-other.
