hi i was wondering if you can edit my supplemental essays for nyu before i submit it in:
Describe a trait or characteristic that has been passed along to you by your family. Tell us why you like or dislike this aspect of yourself. (500 CHARACTERS MAX)
Straight pearl teeth never ran in my family. As a matter of fact, I have inherited from my mother and grandmother- two enormous thick diamond shaped incisors that shrouds the bottom, minimizing its real size. In the sun, my teeth glows a bright yellow instead of a pallid white. I love my golden gems because they exhibit an original; they were never bleached. I especially feel ecstatic when a curved smile plasters across my face, revealing small but happy white structures littered around my jaw.
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).
National Honors Society (NHS) had opened up a new chapter in my life. Through a recent parent-teacher conference at school, I found a hidden quality. In just two hours after school had ended, the president of NHS assigned me to welcome families and give tours to them while they looked for room numbers. My nerves jumped everywhere and I stuttered words, mixing strange syllables together. A father had reprimanded me for speaking too softly, leaving me speechless. But I did not back down. Instead, his actions encouraged me to reach out to others. I bolstered my self-confidence by approaching parents with a hearty "Hello! Welcome to HSES!" and putting a silly spin to talks about teachers. The experience of ridding my timidity to uncover a "never-before-seen" gusto demonstrates what National Honors Society considered to be honorable to its organization: character."
Describe a trait or characteristic that has been passed along to you by your family. Tell us why you like or dislike this aspect of yourself. (500 CHARACTERS MAX)
Straight pearl teeth never ran in my family. As a matter of fact, I have inherited from my mother and grandmother- two enormous thick diamond shaped incisors that shrouds the bottom, minimizing its real size. In the sun, my teeth glows a bright yellow instead of a pallid white. I love my golden gems because they exhibit an original; they were never bleached. I especially feel ecstatic when a curved smile plasters across my face, revealing small but happy white structures littered around my jaw.
In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).
National Honors Society (NHS) had opened up a new chapter in my life. Through a recent parent-teacher conference at school, I found a hidden quality. In just two hours after school had ended, the president of NHS assigned me to welcome families and give tours to them while they looked for room numbers. My nerves jumped everywhere and I stuttered words, mixing strange syllables together. A father had reprimanded me for speaking too softly, leaving me speechless. But I did not back down. Instead, his actions encouraged me to reach out to others. I bolstered my self-confidence by approaching parents with a hearty "Hello! Welcome to HSES!" and putting a silly spin to talks about teachers. The experience of ridding my timidity to uncover a "never-before-seen" gusto demonstrates what National Honors Society considered to be honorable to its organization: character."