FSU - Consider him, he is smart he gets good grades

Dear University of Flordia i am not sure about how do this i am only 14 but this about someone else he is greatest football player ever he goes to greene County tech which is in paragould, arkansas he is a senior this year and His name is aaron ray orr he loves football more than anything and he loves flordia yall should take a look at him if your interested call me at 1 918 721 3040 and ill tell y'all when he has a game tomorrow sorry im not very good at spelling but please consider him and sorry if the wrong University all this is confusing just i knw how much it means to him and he has talent i do not want to see it go to waste. and he is smart he gets good grades but like i said give him a chance he has other colleges offering but he wont go to any but Flordia. Well thank you so much please call

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Cool, Bethany! And for your effort to help this person, you deserve to have a lesson in strategic writing:

Look for the sentence you wrote that is going to make the reader want to do what you hope she will do. Which sentence is most persuasive?

I think it is this one: "He is smart he gets good grades but like i said give him a chance he has other colleges offering but he wont go to any but Flordia." I want to see if you are willing to rewrite this letter and MAKE THIS SENTENCE YOUR THEME.

They do not need to be told things they already know. Give what you have to offer. What you have to offer is YOUR perspective on the situation, and from your perspective you are able to see that he is interested in no colleges except this one. Tell them all about what you have observed and how enthusiastic he is.

:-)

I'm confused, are you sending them a letter? I'm not sure if you can do this. All you can really do is hope FSU sees how great he is through his application.