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"What I can contribute to UTSA" (University of Texas at San Antonio)


TB_1588 1 / 2  
Feb 26, 2009   #1
Ok folks I need some assistance on the topic " What I can contribute to UTSA" . I was denied admission to UTSA for the 2009 fall semester and wanted to do somthing about it. I did some research and decided to try and get into UTSA by doin the admission appeal process. I already did the appeal letter like it states to have and also recieved a recommindation letter ,all is left is a personal essay. The essay i chose was yep you guess it! " what I can contribute to UTSA as a student". Now I have some ideas already but im still stumped on how to go about this essay.I was very active athletically in high school. I played all varsity sports all 4 years Track,football, basketball and baseball. I joined just the science club and i was also active in that .I come from a small town here in texas .Could I possibly put somthing like in my essay? like extracuricular activies?I really want to get in at UTSA to attain my computer science degree. If anyone had to do or helped someone with a similar situation like mine,I would really be thankfull if anyone could point me in the rite direction!

EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Feb 26, 2009   #2
The problem here is that we don't actually know you, and so don't have the slightest clue as to what you would or could contribute to UTSA. However, the usual approach is to highlight extracurricular activities you have been involved in in high school, and then explain how you would become involved in the university version of those activities. If you don't have any extra-curricular activities, you could still talk about which ones you would join if you were accepted. If you were to post the ideas you currently have here, that might help us come up with more detailed suggestions.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,337 129  
Feb 26, 2009   #3
How about making a plan to actually contribute something? In fact, how about going out and doing it! With your activities and athleticism, I would guess you are a people person. Can you research the school to find out how you might initiate a meaningful program... perhaps to help students with disabilities or raise money for underfunded programs? This may sound difficult, but actually it is quite easy to contribute to an organization. you can tell them in your essay that, having been denied admission, you decided to exert great effort to achieve something meaningful. All you need to do is get some current students to join your effort. Can you provide a service, or tutoring, or coaching for younger kids who might somehow be involved with the school? Can you organize a club for college athletes who are willing to spend a weekend or two coaching high school players? That is the best idea I can come up with. the important thing is to actually send out some advertisements right away. Try going to google blogger and starting a blog. You can do it all in a matter of days, and if you schedule a time to plan the event (soccer camp?), you will have great ammunition for the essay!!

Ever heard the stories about the Zen temple where a new person wanted to join and was rejected? He sat outside the temple for several days to show how serious he was about getting in. So, they let him in. I don't think you need to do that (although it would be newsworthy), but the soccer camp thing would be cool.

Just take the first step to start a beneficial organization, and then write your essay! In your essay, provide a link to the blog!
OP TB_1588 1 / 2  
Feb 27, 2009   #4
Intro to my contributions essay !!! check it out!!

"As a student at UTSA, I pledge not only to be a positive role model in the class room but out of it as-well. I vouch that my contributions to the roadrunner university will be beneficial as I hope to walk on UTSA's athletic teams such as the track team and basketball team. I would also like to join and participate in the intramurals that UTSA has. I also wish to join the roadrunners organized clubs and have a positive impact on them. Education is a tool that must be used everyday in order to be succesfull and I see UTSA to guiding me to a brighter future"

OK folks just let me know whats needed to be done. Im not really down with this intro but its somthing! so please help me! oh and roadrunner is the universitys mascot for those who were wondering lol
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,337 129  
Feb 28, 2009   #5
Ha ha, yeah, at first I thought it was where you go to learn how to elude that wile coyote.

Okay, this looks good and enthusiastic.

"As a student at UTSA, I pledge not only to be a positive role model in the class room but out of it as-well. I vouch that my contributions to the roadrunner university will be beneficial as I hope to walk on UTSA's athletic teams such as the track team, basketball team, and participate the intramural program.

I also wish to join the roadrunners organized clubs and have a positive impact on them by [doing what extraordinary things?].

This is a different subject and need to be in a new paragraph: Education is a tool that must be used everyday in order to be successful and I see UTSA to guiding me to a brighter future; (after this semi-colon, say something specific about how it can do that, why you see that, what makes you choose this school)

If you got rejected the first time, you need to be very strong here with you impression you make. What if you were someone who had a passionate vision to build kids' self-esteem through athletics... and give them the empowerment YOU recieved through sports? Can you be that person? Try to get specific, and really be this person whom the school cannot do without.


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