"a crew member at Trader Joe's" - extracurricular activities (common app)

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As a crew member at Trader Joe's you become a well rounded to answer all questions and create excellent customer service. Being employed with Trader Joe's has taught me how to work well with people, and work hard to achieve my goals. Many tasks assigned here are hard work and have to be done carefully and precisely. Given the opportunity to work in such a helpful and warm environment has guided me to work hard towards my career. Discussing allergies, blood sugar levels, weight loss, or even seeing smiles on customers faces leads me in the direction to become a nurse. Many skills i have acquired from Trader Joe's that will help me in my future endeavors are; Time management, Engaging with many people, Memorization, Patience, Helping people suit their needs, and most importantly making people happy.

As a crew member at Trader Joe's you become a well roundedI became well-rounded in order to answer all questions and createprovide excellent customer service. Being employed withat Trader Joe's has taught me how to work well with people, and work hard to achieve my goals. Many tasks assigned here are harddifficultwork and have to be done carefully and preciselyand therefore require care and precision . Given the opportunity to work in such a helpful and warm environment has guided me to work hard towards my career. Discussing allergies, blood sugar levels, weight loss, or even seeing smiles on customers' faces leads me in the direction to become a nurse. Many skills I have acquired from Trader Joe's that will help me in my future endeavors are, such ast ime management, e ngaging with many people, m emorization, p atience, h elping people suit their needs, and most importantly making people happy.

Great essay! I just fixed a few minor stylistic and capitalization errors. Good luck in school! :)