Hello I am writing a college essay for Temple U and was wondering if the portion of the essay I have written so far looks good. Aswell as if I should finish the essay with a conclusion of what I have now or if I should go deeper into why I want to go to Temple U. I can only have 5000 characters, just so you know.
Prompt: Please tell us more about yourself. Relate one or more experiences or circumstances that have contributed to your personal and/or academic development.
My dad had always told me that every hardship I would face would shape me into a stronger version of myself, even if I couldn't see it at the time. This lesson became clear when navigating my cultural identity and working in construction. From these experiences, I've learned the importance of being true to myself and working towards what I want out of my life. Be it the time when I learned to love my culture, did challenging work in construction, or even came to realize my interest in marketing, each challenge taught me different lessons. It was these lessons that kept pushing me toward my ambition, a career in marketing, where I can apply these experiences to make a difference.
One of the earliest moments I experienced these lessons was when I felt lost with my cultural identity. Growing up as an Indian who followed Sikhism in America was like being stuck between two worlds. At home, it was a world of tradition and strong values that represent Sikhism, but the outside was a world of kids who didn't have these traditions and values they had others. I remember being eight years old and constantly telling my parents I wanted to cut my hair to fit in with everyone else. I knew that cutting my hair was against my religion, but I kept asking my parents because I wanted to be like everyone on the outside. They eventually allowed me to cut my hair, and I was happy about it. But as I grew older, getting to high school and community college, it clicked to me that I was trying to be everyone else and losing the roots that my family has had for generations. This was a big turning point for me because I realized how valuable being authentic with myself was, and it allowed me to separate myself from the rest. Since then, I feel I have grown a lot as a person because I learned that being authentic matters more than outside validation, which has contributed to my academic and personal growth in ways that I could never imagine.
This personal growth has gone hand in hand with my academic and working experience, which has equally shaped me into the person I am now. When I started my current job in construction, I was a senior in high school and started as a laborer who cleaned up job sites as well as helped my coworkers when they needed it. I slowly moved up the ranks to do other tasks that required more skill, effort, and time, but by then, I had entered community college. It was tough balancing classes, homework, and work, but I knew it was going to be worth it so that I could follow my passion for marketing. Working and going to college at the same time has taught me a lot about what it takes to succeed, such as the value of working hard, being disciplined, and managing my time which are all skills that have and will continue to benefit me academically and professionally.
Prompt: Please tell us more about yourself. Relate one or more experiences or circumstances that have contributed to your personal and/or academic development.
My dad had always told me that every hardship I would face would shape me into a stronger version of myself, even if I couldn't see it at the time. This lesson became clear when navigating my cultural identity and working in construction. From these experiences, I've learned the importance of being true to myself and working towards what I want out of my life. Be it the time when I learned to love my culture, did challenging work in construction, or even came to realize my interest in marketing, each challenge taught me different lessons. It was these lessons that kept pushing me toward my ambition, a career in marketing, where I can apply these experiences to make a difference.
One of the earliest moments I experienced these lessons was when I felt lost with my cultural identity. Growing up as an Indian who followed Sikhism in America was like being stuck between two worlds. At home, it was a world of tradition and strong values that represent Sikhism, but the outside was a world of kids who didn't have these traditions and values they had others. I remember being eight years old and constantly telling my parents I wanted to cut my hair to fit in with everyone else. I knew that cutting my hair was against my religion, but I kept asking my parents because I wanted to be like everyone on the outside. They eventually allowed me to cut my hair, and I was happy about it. But as I grew older, getting to high school and community college, it clicked to me that I was trying to be everyone else and losing the roots that my family has had for generations. This was a big turning point for me because I realized how valuable being authentic with myself was, and it allowed me to separate myself from the rest. Since then, I feel I have grown a lot as a person because I learned that being authentic matters more than outside validation, which has contributed to my academic and personal growth in ways that I could never imagine.
This personal growth has gone hand in hand with my academic and working experience, which has equally shaped me into the person I am now. When I started my current job in construction, I was a senior in high school and started as a laborer who cleaned up job sites as well as helped my coworkers when they needed it. I slowly moved up the ranks to do other tasks that required more skill, effort, and time, but by then, I had entered community college. It was tough balancing classes, homework, and work, but I knew it was going to be worth it so that I could follow my passion for marketing. Working and going to college at the same time has taught me a lot about what it takes to succeed, such as the value of working hard, being disciplined, and managing my time which are all skills that have and will continue to benefit me academically and professionally.
