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'cutting off all support and help' - UTA ESSAY B



esther3095 2 / 13  
Nov 24, 2012   #1
"I want to die." My best friend told me, completely serious.
My first thought was "why?" Why would someone so beautiful, intelligent, and talented want to die? I asked her if she had been bullied, if school was stressing her out, or if she was having any problems in her family, the answer was no to each of these questions. She told me she was simply depressed, but that lately it had gotten so bad that she tried to kill herself the other night by overdosing on pills. I was scared, unsure of what to say, I just told her not to worry, that her depression would pass. During the day I tried avoiding her out of fear of saying something that would make her depression worse, and at night I would cry myself to sleep. I simply did not understand what depression was. Once I started talking to her again, I got frustrated. Why couldn't she snap out of it? Everyone has bad days.

What I didn't realize was that I was stigmatizing her. It is an issue that I faced on day-to-day basis. I didn't mean to alienate her, but I had no way of coping with her illness because I did not understand it. I badly wanted to help but I had no way of doing so I slowly grew distant from her. It was out of my control, and seemingly out of hers, so I found myself gradually pushing her away.

This issue is significant to not only me, but to our whole generation. In generations past, people with mental illnesses were often cast aside and stigmatized because they were not understood. It is important that we lend our hands to these people and help them because they are not their illness. People who are depressed are not always moody or suicidal, and it's important for others to see past this image that society has given depression. My failure to comprehend her led me to cast her aside, cutting off all support and help. I feel like my generation has not gotten educated enough about mental illnesses, and we tend to avoid them.

*Any comments/edits are greatly appreciated!

*Please tell me how I should end this essay. Thank you!

moon05 13 / 132  
Nov 24, 2012   #2
If you could give the Prompt it would be better to understand on what you are writing.

would make her depression even worse

Shouldn't you say something like what you did to relieve her from the depression? I just couldn't get it where you wanted to reach with the essay without the Prompt. Same with the ending thing.

Reply with the Prompt and I will come with an answer quickly.
OP esther3095 2 / 13  
Nov 24, 2012   #3
moon05
Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

I am so sorry about that ><
Taylor8294 2 / 2  
Nov 24, 2012   #4
Overall, I thought this was a very interesting topic. However, there was no clear resolution to your relationship with her. After the way it starts, I would guess that college admissions would expect you to seek more knowledge on mental illness and then talk about the relationship that you eventually restored. I like the direction, but talking about a relationship that ended badly is probably not a good idea. Hope this helps! Thanks for your advice on my essay!
moon05 13 / 132  
Nov 24, 2012   #5
Okay first of all, the starting is okay. What you need to do is, show what you did to solve her frustration. Did you do anything for her along with your friends? Anything, just make it look like first of all you did pushed her away, avoiding her... but at the end you realized that you shouldn't and went to her aid. If you are saying that you realized everything but didn't do anything then that means they are just empty words!

and help them because they are not their illness.

What did you try to say with this sentence I didn't quite get it. Were you trying to say like, we should not avoid them instead try to remove their illness and raise awareness about this kind of illness?

and it's important for others to see past this image that society has given this depression.

The ending can be like, give a little idea about how many people are committing suicide every day/month/year just because they didn't have support/ people were avoiding them and it made them more frustrated and so we need to change the view.

If you have got any question ask and try re-posting your essay after another touch.

[If you could kindly help me with my Dickinson Essay it would be a great help. Just tell me if I need to add anything. There's a book I am talking about should I mention about it or not..]


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