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My dad built a kayak; SOP- SAIC - Statement of purpose



huehuehue86 1 / 1  
Oct 31, 2013   #1
Statement of purpose for School of the Art Institute of Chicago. I'm mainly concerned if my ideas are clear enough, but any objective feedback is always super appreciated. Thanks!

When I was in kindergarten my dad build a kayak. I remember going out into his shop to watch him work, excited to see the progress of the sleek wooden boat. I was amazed that something so magnificent could be made by hand. I'm probably the only person in the world who considers my dad an artist; despite him being the average businessman, he can build anything with amazing craftsmanship. It is him who has influenced my interest in art and design most.

My passion for both art and design developed simultaneously. I find that my thoughts about design stem from exploring ideas artistically. I work primarily with ink or acrylic paints and gouaches. The subject matter of my work has always changed, however for about two years now I have developed an interest in making work that references geology, my fathers first trade. I often find myself sifting through old geology texts of my dads-half reading, half tearing out images. It wasn't until this past summer, when I worked in Yellowstone National Park and grew to love mountain climbing, that I was able to witness landscapes like the ones from my father's texts. Ascending a mountain is a unique experience filled with mental and physical challenges. As you pass a certain elevation, you enter an intense geological landscape of scant vegetation, weaning glaciers, and towering couloirs. This newly found, long sought after alien environment, along with the abundant geothermal features of NW Wyoming, influenced my artwork a great deal. I was sketching, painting, writing, and photographing more than I had in a long time.

My design process starts with artistic exploration. It was at the end of the summer, on my last and most difficult climb of the season, that I made the connection between my artwork and design aspirations. We started out at 3 am, with headlamps lighting the way. I spent a few hours in my head as we ascended into the dark, exploring what this surreal landscape was making me feel. And then light broke, we crossed a frigid glacial stream, scaled a bolder field miles wide, and then, after roughly 9 hours of climbing, we made it to the south couloir of Middle Teton. The hardest part of the climb was still to come. So we took a break. Feet away, the thrust up tectonic plate that gave structure to the steep mountain range abruptly stopped and dropped thousands of feet into a small alpine lake. I looked out over what I had just climbed. Boulder fields, glacial meadows, steep rock faces and icy slopes. To negotiate such a landscape requires one to be hyper aware of their surroundings. You must highly consider the space you're in and move with purpose. It was very much a situation of spatial interaction; it was as if I had to design my way perfectly up the face of the mountain in order to achieve the summit. I realized that I don't want to design objects that are merely aesthetically appealing with a hint of function; I want to design objects while taking its space into consideration. I was in school at University of Illinois at Chicago (UIC) for industrial design, but I want to concentrate on something more than just form and aesthetic. I want to explore how objects exist in a space so I can progress in design.

I withdrew from UIC my last week at Yellowstone. Partially because of financial strain, but also because I wanted to be in a program that I knew I would take away a lot from. I feel that SAIC's School of Interior Architecture is a program I could grow a lot from. SAIC being so fine arts based would allow me to continue my artistic explorations and still become a designer with the craftsmanship of my father and the purpose of a mountain climber.

lillilkim 2 / 4  
Nov 3, 2013   #2
The first question I had when I read up to your second paragraph was "how did your dad's wood work influence you to choose your choice of mediums (ink, paints, etc)?" I couldn't relate the two together... Then how did your works of ink/ paints, etc influence you to pursuit your major as a industrial designer?

Secondly, I thought "artistic exploration" was such a broad thing to state. Maybe be more specific? I wish you could also be more specific about this sentence: "I want to explore how objects exist in a space so I can progress in design. " Maybe it's not how objects exist in a space... maybe it's how an object brings a certain personality/ matter/ style/ etc into the spaces of architecture? ...

Third, I wouldn't state your cause of withdrawing from UIC if I were you... maybe just stick with "I wanted to be in a program that I knew I would take away a lot from" etc etc.

Overall I enjoyed reading your writing sample! I thought your writing was clear: where you generally got your motivation for art/ design from, and where you're headed to as a designer. You were descriptive with your outdoors activity and how that influenced you into pursuing your further explorations in industrial design, which was helpful!

These are only my opinion and I hope they helped just a little!
dumi 1 / 6793  
Nov 21, 2013   #3
When I was in kindergarten my dadbuildbuilt a kayak.

..."built" is the past tense of "build".

I remember going out into his shop to watch him work, excited to see the progress of the sleek wooden boat.

I still remember my excitement while watching him progressing with sleek wooden boat in his shop.
OP huehuehue86 1 / 1  
Nov 21, 2013   #4
dumi
I'm currently rewriting the whole thing with the guideline you gave in mind. Super helpful!
I kind of morphed this one into my reason for transferring essay and am going to keep most of the anecdotal narrative stuff there.
Thanks for taking the time to read it and such


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