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Essay #2: In an essay of 300 words or less, tell us something about yourself that isn't covered elsewhere in this application, some interest or experience of yours that you think the University of Illinois should know about as part of the admissions review.
Dance has been an integral part of my life for as long as I can remember. My mother would see me moving around the house, jumping and twirling, dancing to a tune that only I could hear inside my head. I guess one day she decided she'd had enough of me knocking furniture around the house, and soon enrolled me in an actual dance class when I was just five years old.
I continued to learn this Indian classical art, Bharatanatyam, and even after I moved to India I soon found another teacher. I gave many performances along with the other girls from my group, and studied the theory behind the art form to give my Junior and Senior dance examinations, which was a fascinating and challenging experience for me.
Dance has always been a way for me to express myself, an outlet for my emotions. When most people are frustrated they vent to their friends- I dance. Dance is said to be the visual embodiment of music, and to me it symbolizes devotion, concentration and freedom in every aspect. Each class I attend is a whole new journey, a way to dramatize and express a story- from the mythological tales of the Gods to stories of great battles of the kings, to simple everyday happenings set in villages in different corners of India.
Learning this art form has helped me grow intellectually, culturally and most of all, socially. Through Bharatanatyam I found a way to communicate effectively and put forth my ideas in different areas of my life. The attention to the coordination of my expressions, hands and legs while listening to the flow of music, have helped me to multi-task effectively. My performances in front of different audiences has increased my self confidence and helped me to adjust quickly and thrive in different environments.
Most of all, dance has helped me to be passionate for what I care about, letting me immerse myself in anything I endeavor to accomplish.
This is really well written
the only thing I would change is this sentence
I continued to learn this Indian classical art, Bharatanatyam, and even after I moved to India I soon found another teacher.
I had to read it a few times to understand what you were trying to say.
I would change it to something like this:
I learnt the Indian classical art of Bharatanatyam. Even after I moved to India, I soon found another teacher.
or
Even after I moved to India, I continued to learn the Indian classical art of Bharatanatyam.
