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'daydreaming about my Senior Night' - Short Response



shayshay3194 5 / 9  
Dec 31, 2011   #1
Prompt: Elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities

As my final track season nears, I keep daydreaming about my Senior Night - the party at the end of the season where the team shows their appreciation for the seniors. It's tradition for each senior to give a mini impromptu speech, but I can't stop mentally preparing mine early. I'm scared that if I think on the spot, the words won't come out right. I can't afford for that to happen, because I need my teammates to know what they mean to me. I need them to know that practicing alongside them has taught me about passion and endurance. I need them to know that representing them at important meets has given me invaluable experience in performing under extreme pressure. Most importantly, I need to thank them for showing me how it feels to belong - for loving and accepting me when I needed it most. I need to let them know that they've taught me the importance of a strong community. I need them to know that I love them, and that I'll always be there for them. Once a family, always a family.

Any comments are appreciated!

jackwhite77 1 / 3  
Dec 31, 2011   #2
I think this is actually pretty good at its core but I wish it told a bit more about what made you want to do track in the first place....maybe mention one of your events
JamezNeedsHelp 1 / 4  
Dec 31, 2011   #3
You might want to focus on what you do in track. What event do you run. Details would perhaps be helpful for other admission officers. This is a very interesting way to express your love for the sport and your team mates. Good luck!!!


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