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Describe one of your quirks and why it is part of who you are. UVA supplement



Marilu 1 / -  
Sep 1, 2014   #1
Does this even make sense? Editing is appreciate but I really want to know if this is a strong enough quirk.

My family knows that in biology SAV can stand for Submersed Aquatic Vegetation. I provided them with that interesting tidbit while we were on a touring boat in Key West, Florida. On another occasion one of my friends got a job where she was required to provide a fingerprint to be kept on file. My response to her, after she had recounted her experience, was to share that your tongue-print, similar to your fingerprint, is the only of its kind. My father and I once got into an argument because he found it hard to believe that a bolt of lightening is actually 5 times as hot as the surface of the sun.

I have a passion for knowledge, and more particularly I have a passion for obscure facts. I find the world fascinating in its obscurities. Like people, its full of things we don't know about and won't know if we don't actively try to keep learning. For this reason I am always asking questions, trying to find the reasons behind the way things work. I have a reputation for knowing random facts and an even bigger one for sharing them with the group. Its part of who I am and nothing delights me more than sharing something interesting with another person. As I mature into a higher-level learner and as a person I want to maintain that same level of fascination and easy captivity.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Sep 1, 2014   #2
That is definitely a good quirk. But the problem with the essay is that the first paragraph is jumping around and confusing the reader with no apparent reason. So I would suggest that you revise the paper by combining the contents of the second paragraph with the first paragraph or totally rewriting the essay. You need to mention right from the start what your quirk is and then give examples of it. For example: "I love learning about obscure information and then mentioning it to my family at the oddest of times." That could be the start of the paper, then you can mention a few of the quirky things you have quoted to your family and how they react to it for further effect. Believe me, what you have is a very strong and annoying quirk :-)


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