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Describe the world you come from--MIT Prompt. "Cascade as I Become More Curious"



tommyj 5 / 6  
Dec 30, 2009   #1
Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?

Why is the sky blue?

Why do I have an attraction for the girl next to me?

Why am I here?

My world indeed is a waterfall. Questions constantly cascade upon me, leaving me drenched in my own curiosity. For instance, when, on another bright afternoon of Physics, I caught myself wondering why the enormous heaven is immensely blue, I curiously interrupted the teacher, even if the lecture was different from "sky" or "color".

I yearn for knowledge of both the physical world and the forces that act upon it. All these questions begin with "why", but not all of them lend their answers nicely. I can easily find the answer to the changing color of the sky in the waves of light it refracts. As I mature further into adulthood, however, the questions increase in complexity. Why am I here wondering about the sky...Why am I here?

Where will I find the answer to that?

I have come to understand that, ostensibly, these questions will not find answers here on earth. I need to discover what lies beyond the turquoise gate of this prison-like orb. As a physicist and a philosopher, I know I will have a better sense of the universe, both in its physical and metaphysical natures. Questions fall in small beads but come together and drench me heavily into deeper curiosity. As a human being, I will never have knowledge of everything. But, as an individual drowning in cold curiosity, I need to dry up occasionally, too.

ericpark 2 / 9  
Dec 30, 2009   #2
I think asking more interesting questions in the beginning would improve your essay a lot. A more effective hooks as you say.

I caution the prison-like orb. I mean college understand the need to expand beyond Earth, but making Earth sound too negative contradicts your beginning. First curiosity and then disdain.

Perhaps I am reading too much into this, but just words of caution I guess.

I would really appreciate your help on my essay:


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