designing and piloting experiments - mit activity pleasure essay critique

Does it sounds very boring and plain?

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

Like creating a new flavor for ice cream, designing and piloting experiments were serendipitous and fun.
I had the idea of lava lamps when I took my Redoxon and applied it to my workshop. Under my guidance, children carefully mixed oil with colored water in a bottle with a flashlamp at the bottom. The instant they threw a Redoxon tablet in, the bright mixture fizzed, bubbled and erupted. They clapped their hands with amazement and I was delighted by the magical power of knowledge.

Another time, I tried something more hands-on. Visitors and I folded the filter paper into a butterfly and then they splashed it with solutions of varying pH values. With a final touch of universal indicator, the butterfly completed its metamorphosis and flapped its colorful wings before their sparkling eyes.

Knowledge is not for its own sake, but also about people.

If you were about it being boring well don't fret. I found it very interesting. You seem to really enjoy it and you gave a very good description of an example.

Not boring , it is entertaining
it sounds like its volunteer work or something- I'd like to hear where this is taking place and what your position is.

sorry, i forgot tt it exceeds the word count....so i tried to cut it down.but still 130.Can someone help me cut to 100...

I really like this one. it shows off how kind you are with the whole sharing knowledge thing and its pretty concise.

I think you should cut off one of the examples and elaborate on the other one to get it under the word limit.

Could you also look at my MIT essays?