1. Describe the culture in which you grew up. What are its strengths and weaknesses?
I grew up in a culture of Disney princesses, Sesame Street, Barney and Blues Clues. During a time when the only television before ten A.M. was cartoons, and before cartoon network cut out shows like Dexter's Laboratory and Code Name Kids Next Door. Where the first Harry Potter book became known, just in time to receive my letter to Hogwarts and the most important thing on my mind was being sorted into Gryffindor and staying as far away from Slytherin as possible. Throughout my upbringing, the movie and tv industry were the people behind some of my first words. At age two, I learned the word mine right before Barney taught me how to share. Harry Potter taught me to read long novels, to fake a British accent, and to never say bloody hell around my parents. T.V. taught me how to properly spell laboratory, and that if I wanted to be like Princess Ariel, I would have to learn how to swim first. T.V. shows taught me to just be a kid. While this culture may not be as immediately visible as my African American heritage, it played just as large a part in my upbringing.
I am 79 characters over the limit please help me cut this down. Do I answer the entire prompt?
6. What final Jeopardy category would ensure your victory? (200 characters)
- I can't think of an interesting Jeopardy category that has not all ready been done.
It's interesting and amazing!
Where the first Harry Potter book became known, just in time to receive my letter to Hogwarts and the most important thing on my mind was being sorted into Gryffindor and staying as far away from Slytherin as possible.
I think you can change it and cut some parts.
You didn't answer to "What are its strengths and weaknesses?" so well; you can mention the weaknesses too. also, you should clarify the good points better, like:
T.V. shows taught me to just be a kid.
**** please read my Princeton Supplement!
This is due is five hours please help me edit
I need to cut out almost 200 characters, Please help and I will edit you essay right away.
Also ....
What final Jeopardy category would ensure your victory? (200 characters)
As a drummer, I had to pay close attention to detail. I had to know what instrument was playing and change pace for various sounds. Because of this, I would win the category; noise behind the music.
I would suggest you a new beginning. The sentence you have states your "conclusion"
Please if you can read my JHU supplement :)
I think it is pretty good actually, they pretty much corrected any errors i could find ^
Completely reorganized. Which version should I go with? I have less than an hour left.
TV shows taught me to just be a kid. Throughout my upbringing, the movie and TV industry were the people behind some of my first words. At age two, I learned the word mine right before Barney taught me how to share. Harry Potter taught me to enjoy long novels, to fake a British accent, and to never say bloody hell around my parents. Cartoons taught me how to properly spell laboratory, and realize that if I wanted to be like Princess Ariel, I would first have to learn how to swim. I grew up in a culture of Disney princesses, Barney and Dexter's Laboratory, but in exchange, I lost out on valuable time with my family. While this culture may not be as immediately visible as my African American heritage, it played just as large a part in my upbringing.
mine right before Barney taught me how to share
- put the word mine in quotes
bloody hell
- put it in quotes
Thanks so much
