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Diverse lifestyle and how VCU will benefit me -- VCU Personal Statement



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Oct 24, 2011   #1
Not exactly finished with my personal statement, at this point it is very rough. Just want some feedback on how it is so far. Thanks

Here's the prompt:

In 250-300 words, tell us more about you and why you are considering VCU

Growing up in a town with a population of just over 1,000 people and a graduating class with only 150 students it's hard to be exposed to diversity and other points of view. Throughout my life and school career I've mainly been surrounded by middle-class White Americans. I feel like everyone in my town believes the same things, feels the same way about issues, and is raised the same I was raised. I believe the vast amount of diversity and the size of Virginia Commonwealth University will allow me to grow and thrive as a person. It will allow me to see others' points of view and broaden my horizons. It will permit me to get away from the typical small town mind set. VCU will allow me to become worldlier and become a better person because of it. Living in a big, bustling city like Richmond will allow me to explore different cultures, meet students/faculty from all around the globe which will allow me to become more educated and scholarly.

sarahadams 11 / 22  
Oct 24, 2011   #2
("and is raised the same I was raised")= i think it should be " and we are all raised with the same morals"

- i loved how you used living in a city to explain of learning because i live in new york city and everyday i step out of my house i learn something new whether its culture, religion, location and etc.

- this is a great essay.... GREAT JOB


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