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'doing something that makes me happy' - Yale: tell us more about yourself



Alikap 6 / 15  
Dec 21, 2011   #1
the prompt is basically tell us something about yourself that we won't get out of your app. Let me know what you think.

I have lived in San Luis Obispo, California since I was five years old. I was lucky to grow up in a safe community where I could spend entire afternoons wreaking havoc on rollerblades or cruising around on bikes with the other neighborhood kids. I learned to be independent and to take advantage of the environment that I lived in. As I grew up, more and more opportunity opened up for me. I spent my weekends embarking on outdoor excursions with friends-camping, hiking, exploring the area-and I became a true lover of nature. This year I spent almost three weeks of my summer sleeping in a sleeping bag. For a week it was in a tent with my best friend in Big Sur, California. We spent our days hiking, biking, and floating down the barely rushing excuse for a river and our evenings eating canned beans and hot dogs cooked over the fire. Another week was on an air mattress under the stars when I went with my family and two other families that I've grown up with on our traditional yearly camping trip. For a few days it was on the patio of my aunt's beach house, where every once in a while a big wave would crash up against the deck and wake me up with a spray of sea water to the face. She wanted me to teach my cousins how to surf and I was more than happy to sacrifice a little sleep to teach them something that I wish I could have learned at such a young age.

If growing up in San Luis Obispo has taught me anything, it's that the little things in life are the ones that really count. Being exposed to so much natural beauty and living this so called "SLO life" has given me different priorities than many. I know that the things I enjoy most-going to the beach, standing on the top of a mountain, going on a run through the vineyards, and spending time with the people who are important to me-come for free. Knowing this gives me the confidence to take a chance and pursue a career in something I am passionate about. I've always been really interested in English, I love music, and I'd do anything to have a job that would allow me to work outdoors, but I've heard time and time again that it's difficult to maintain or even find a stable career in those fields. But I've grown up following my heart, and doing the things I love, and I don't plan on stopping now. Even if things start out slow, I will be doing something that makes me happy. I will always be able to give back to the community that has played such a big part in shaping me into the person I am today, and in the end that's what is really important to me.

EF_Susan - / 2310  
Dec 21, 2011   #2
For a week, it was in a tent with my best friend in Big Sur, California.

She wanted me to teach my cousins how to surf, and I was more than happy to sacrifice a little sleep to teach them something that I wish I could have learned at such a young age.

I will always be able to give back to the community---You should tell some way that you have, or plan on, 'giving back to the community'. Up to here, it just seems like your life has been about relaxing and having fun. If you do anything to give back to the community, you should say what it is, so you don't sound like you just threw that in.

Good luck in school!

:)
elpike109 1 / 6  
Dec 22, 2011   #3
I like it! I like also how you are very clear about what it is you like, and your goals about how to incorporate that into your life. I think it paints a good picture of you, even with very few words.
twinnigan 2 / 8  
Dec 22, 2011   #4
I think the point at the end was strong, but the first part describing your summer could be a little more concise. After a while I thought that your whole essay was just going to be describing your camping trips. If you make it shorter and get to the point faster I don't think you will have that issue


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