Dream and efforts you have made to achieve it and your future plan / KAIST

Please describe your dream and the efforts you have made so far to achieve it and your future plan for it. (within 2000 characters/300words)
※ Please include your reason(s) for choosing KAIST in order to achieve your dream and the hardships that you expect to encounter in the process

One of my first students, studying in high school, came to me without knowing the multiplication table. Was he stupid? No. But he thought he was. However, we covered the curriculum from grades 4 to 8 in three months. His phrases, "It seemed much harder in school", and "no one ever explained things in a way I could understand" I have heard from my students numerous times.

This reflects a systemic issue. Many of the schools in our country lack both stable staff and innovative teaching strategies. Students are not included in the learning process, and teachers usually do not adapt their methods to suit the needs of them. As a person who cares about the future of my nation, with little nieces going to get their education there, this worries me a lot.

So I took action. In the summer of 2023, I taught mathematics to children in rural areas. This inspired me to create the OQU project, develop curricula, supervise volunteers, and participate in Algoritmika and LabXPlore educational projects. This experience, along with my research on how social media influences children's perceptions and the impact of globalization on Kazakhstan's education system, deepened my understanding of the educational needs of children.

However, I feel I lack the deep knowledge needed to more significantly impact science and education. That's why I chose KAIST. The university's research in artificial intelligence and educational technologies inspires me. For example, the Educational AI Research Center focuses on personalizing learning with machine learning, and courses like Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning offer insights into how technology can benefit society.

My dream is to return to Kazakhstan with this knowledge, reform education, and inspire children to study the sciences. I believe innovations can transform education, and the experience gained at KAIST will help me achieve this.

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