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"I have a dream" - NYU elaborate on an academic area of interest



NYUgrl 2 / 3  
Oct 21, 2011   #1
please elaborate on an academic area of interest and how you wish to explore it at NYU's campuses in New York or Abu Dhabi or at one of our global academic centers around the world. Please share any activities or experiences you have had that have cultivated your intellectual interests leading you to choose to study at the NYU campus of your choice.

"I have a dream" Martin Luther once quoted. The first time I heard those words, I said to myself do not we all? But now I realize that his wish was not merely a simple dream but the dream to change the future, to improve humankind, and spread morality throughout the world. So my dreams and goals do not have to be a simple one I said to myself. It must be one like Martin Luther's, one that would change the world.

So I chose to strive to be a doctor. As someone who has always been interested in biology, medicine appeals to me as it would allow me to use my skills in particular way, doing one of the most important jobs in the world, saving people's lives. Science had meant a great deal for me since I was a little girl. From watching doctor movie series to performing surgery on my dolls, I have seen my passion for the job growing. I thought that their white gown was a gown of royalty, while their stethoscopes were crown of their knowledge. And I have acknowledged that my educational objective can be best accomplished through a formal education which will help me create original bequeaths to contribute to my community and the institution that have played a part in my success.

It was the abundant resources in the form of internships, research facilities and up to date technologies of the New York University Abu Dhabi that grabbed my heart and pulled it towards it. Its educational qualities and ideal location in shored me that it was the place I want to bloom not only in academic education but also in experience. And I desire to use the recourses to obtain the best I have to offer by contributing to the community, the institution that have contributed to my success and to all who need what I have to offer.

vgrommes 2 / 3  
Oct 21, 2011   #2
on you first sentence you should change do not to don't.

change dream , to goal on second sentence

change this sentence
Science had meant a great deal for me since I was a little girl.

Growing up science meant alot to me as a little girl

revise your last sentenc its confuse . i think it should be two sentences


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