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'easy going and fun guy' - Stanford roommate essay - Multifaceted



AbsoluteBliss 5 / 13  
Jan 1, 2012   #1
Will revise a bit more, and I may drop the list, but here's what I have so far:

I am presumably one of the most multifaceted people you will encounter this week! I'm fluent in Photoshop, Illustrator, and Cinema 4D, I have a fundamental understanding of HTML and CSS, and I can land a 720 nosegrab on a snowboard. I'm fairly adventurous - I've launched myself off of eighty-foot cliffs into subzero waters, swum through underwater caves off the coast of St. Barts, and soared off of thirty-foot jumps (the unfortunate source of a minor concussion). I play a few instruments, namely drums, and my piano skills are steadily improving. I'm also relatively skilled in interior design, so expect a pretty awesome dorm room.

(Don't get me wrong, I also love learning.)

A few, possibly interesting, facts:
- I grew up in Manhattan, and I've always loved cities.
- My first flight was to Switzerland, at a few weeks old, and I've loved traveling (and flying) ever since I can remember.
- I play tennis, soccer, golf, basketball, I wakeboard, slalom water ski, and I haven't done it in a while, but I can ski too.

- Breaking Bad, House, Dexter, and The Big Bang Theory rank among my favorite TV shows.
- My iTunes library is eight thousand songs strong, and includes everything from Beethoven to U2 to Jay-Z.
- I have friends in San Francisco, Los Angeles, The Netherlands, France, Spain, England, Canada, Germany, Switzerland, Belgium, Australia, and New York, obviously.
- Heavenly / Lake Tahoe is one of my favorite places in the world.

I would say I'm a pretty easy going and fun guy to be around, and I can assure you some memorable times. An added plus: if you're an engineer, into business, computer science, whatever, we can build a product or company, and test the waters of Silicon Valley.

Cheers,
Christian

ZhoeK 5 / 157  
Jan 1, 2012   #2
Christian

I am not sure if the AOs will appreciate your layout but I do think its pretty entertaining.
I don't know if its just me but the first line comes off as a little arrogant, so you might wanna make it more relate-able/personable.

Otherwise I like it, its funny yet informative but not boring. I didn't see any grammatical flaws either.

Hope this helps!
gparfenov 4 / 12  
Jan 1, 2012   #3
I agree with ZhoeK, you do come off slightly arrogant--I think it's mainly the use of "presumably." And I would also change the layout because bullet points kind of seem like an easy way out.
m7md 4 / 16  
Jan 1, 2012   #4
content is great layout needs some work i feel i am reading a laundry list try using a letter format instead


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