Hi! My application is due on Jan 15th and I was hoping someone could critique my writing! There is no word limit and I don't want my essay to be to wordy or boring. I appreciate any criticism!
PROMPT:
b. Truth or- Dare. Have you ever accepted a dare from another individual? What was it? Regardless of the outcome, how did you feel after? Do tell.
Do not eat meat, dairy, or by-products for an entire year. Sounds simple, right? Well you are wrong. It could easily be one of the most difficult and disciplined things I have ever done, and as the stubborn person that I am, I could not possible back down from it. I had been recently thinking about going vegan, meaning that I cannot eat eggs, meats, or any other food with animal ingredients in it. Once I brought up the idea of actually going through with it, my brother had thought of making it a dare instead. As an added incentive, if I held a vegan diet for an entire year without cheating, my brother would give me $200; if I fell through, I would have to buy him a new, and expensive, mouse for his computer. My mom and I researched the vegan diet and bought all the food and supplements that I would need to stay healthy. The hardest part of starting was getting rid of all the food I could no longer eat. Telling people was a close second. I dreaded having to explain to everyone why I was going vegan and having to hear their questions; "Why?", "How?", and "You are crazy" are the most common responses I got. Eating at other people's houses and restaurants suddenly became a large headache. I tried new things like tofu, mock meats, and edamame. While some tasted better than others, I always tried new things and expanded my palate. In the same time it took to get easier, things suddenly took a turn and got way harder than before. As much as I complained and whined, I really enjoyed the process and learned some new things along the way. I saw how my actions affected my family, friends, and myself. I learned to appreciate things that I had once overlooked. For four months and 7 days, I was officially a vegan. While I didn't complete the dare, I feel like I still came out a winner; trying to adapt to a new diet and maintain a crazy schedule is no easy feat. Plus, I still have not bought that mouse for my brother.
PROMPT:
b. Truth or- Dare. Have you ever accepted a dare from another individual? What was it? Regardless of the outcome, how did you feel after? Do tell.
Do not eat meat, dairy, or by-products for an entire year. Sounds simple, right? Well you are wrong. It could easily be one of the most difficult and disciplined things I have ever done, and as the stubborn person that I am, I could not possible back down from it. I had been recently thinking about going vegan, meaning that I cannot eat eggs, meats, or any other food with animal ingredients in it. Once I brought up the idea of actually going through with it, my brother had thought of making it a dare instead. As an added incentive, if I held a vegan diet for an entire year without cheating, my brother would give me $200; if I fell through, I would have to buy him a new, and expensive, mouse for his computer. My mom and I researched the vegan diet and bought all the food and supplements that I would need to stay healthy. The hardest part of starting was getting rid of all the food I could no longer eat. Telling people was a close second. I dreaded having to explain to everyone why I was going vegan and having to hear their questions; "Why?", "How?", and "You are crazy" are the most common responses I got. Eating at other people's houses and restaurants suddenly became a large headache. I tried new things like tofu, mock meats, and edamame. While some tasted better than others, I always tried new things and expanded my palate. In the same time it took to get easier, things suddenly took a turn and got way harder than before. As much as I complained and whined, I really enjoyed the process and learned some new things along the way. I saw how my actions affected my family, friends, and myself. I learned to appreciate things that I had once overlooked. For four months and 7 days, I was officially a vegan. While I didn't complete the dare, I feel like I still came out a winner; trying to adapt to a new diet and maintain a crazy schedule is no easy feat. Plus, I still have not bought that mouse for my brother.
