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Question: Why NYU?
New York University was an automatic choice for me. I grew up on the Upper East Side of Manhattan, and though we moved away years ago, part of me has never left. I'm in love with the city; it's inspiring, eclectic, and full of opportunity. Attending New York University would put me in the middle of the environment I love, while providing me with the unbeatable education I need. As an artist I'm constantly looking for new ideas, and the multitude of majors and minors offered at NYU would allow me to explore subjects besides visual arts, gain that knowledge, and apply those new concepts to my work. New York University is also full of high-achieving and bright students, and being in a competitive atmosphere would encourage me to push myself to do better than my best. Also, the numerous internship and job opportunities New York has to offer would give me first hand experience in the field, as well a competitive edge over graduates from other smaller schools. Many colleges have the ability to give me an education, but only New York University has the ability to transform me from a high school student, to a well-rounded and experienced career woman. New York University would be the perfect place for me to learn and grow, and I would be honored to get the opportunity to pursue my education here.
Question: Why NYU?
New York University was an automatic choice for me. I grew up on the Upper East Side of Manhattan, and though we moved away years ago, part of me has never left. I'm in love with the city; it's inspiring, eclectic, and full of opportunity. Attending New York University would put me in the middle of the environment I love, while providing me with the unbeatable education I need. As an artist I'm constantly looking for new ideas, and the multitude of majors and minors offered at NYU would allow me to explore subjects besides visual arts, gain that knowledge, and apply those new concepts to my work. New York University is also full of high-achieving and bright students, and being in a competitive atmosphere would encourage me to push myself to do better than my best. Also, the numerous internship and job opportunities New York has to offer would give me first hand experience in the field, as well a competitive edge over graduates from other smaller schools. Many colleges have the ability to give me an education, but only New York University has the ability to transform me from a high school student, to a well-rounded and experienced career woman. New York University would be the perfect place for me to learn and grow, and I would be honored to get the opportunity to pursue my education here.
