Can anyone please look over my essay? I don't think it's very strong but it's all I have. Thanks ahead of time!
Currently it is at 310 words. Also the deadline is very soon so any advice would be much appreciated.
Topic: The expression "never fear / change" can be interpreted many ways. How might it apply to your life? (250-400 words)
Facing the unknown is difficult.
When I stepped onto the edge, my heart was racing. The words of encouragement coming from my peers and advisor did nothing for me. I kicked a small rock into the "keyhole" and waited for the splash, but it never came. As I looked to the pool below, I grasped my rope tight and shakily said "I'm ready."
While I had rappelled many times before, this was unlike any other. I was on Caravan my freshman year in Paria Canyon, UT, where my canyoneering group and I were to rappel over a hundred feet into a pool of water ten feet deep. My first instinct was to be afraid. It wasn't because I didn't trust myself, nor was it the height. It was the sheer fact that I had never done what I was about to do.
Not long into the rappel, my fear turned to excitement and the whole experience was exhilarating. I felt like I was flying and the daunting water below became a cool, refreshing relief from the heat of the day. It seemed ridiculous that only a few seconds before I was terrified to leave the safety of the ledge above.
I've used my realization in Paria Canyon as a motivation to go out on a limb, even if I'm not sure what the results will be. I cannot say that I've never feared new experiences again, but I can say that I've had a new outlook on them. The quote "never fear / change" tells me to never be afraid of what the future may hold. Change is the one aspect of life that will always occur and can never be avoided. Overall, my best memories are those when I went out of my way to face my fears, instead of letting them overcome me and I'll never regret that.
Currently it is at 310 words. Also the deadline is very soon so any advice would be much appreciated.
Topic: The expression "never fear / change" can be interpreted many ways. How might it apply to your life? (250-400 words)
Facing the unknown is difficult.
When I stepped onto the edge, my heart was racing. The words of encouragement coming from my peers and advisor did nothing for me. I kicked a small rock into the "keyhole" and waited for the splash, but it never came. As I looked to the pool below, I grasped my rope tight and shakily said "I'm ready."
While I had rappelled many times before, this was unlike any other. I was on Caravan my freshman year in Paria Canyon, UT, where my canyoneering group and I were to rappel over a hundred feet into a pool of water ten feet deep. My first instinct was to be afraid. It wasn't because I didn't trust myself, nor was it the height. It was the sheer fact that I had never done what I was about to do.
Not long into the rappel, my fear turned to excitement and the whole experience was exhilarating. I felt like I was flying and the daunting water below became a cool, refreshing relief from the heat of the day. It seemed ridiculous that only a few seconds before I was terrified to leave the safety of the ledge above.
I've used my realization in Paria Canyon as a motivation to go out on a limb, even if I'm not sure what the results will be. I cannot say that I've never feared new experiences again, but I can say that I've had a new outlook on them. The quote "never fear / change" tells me to never be afraid of what the future may hold. Change is the one aspect of life that will always occur and can never be avoided. Overall, my best memories are those when I went out of my way to face my fears, instead of letting them overcome me and I'll never regret that.