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I'm fairly clumsy; Letter to a Future Roommate for Stanford



nairbear68 6 / 29  
Dec 15, 2012   #1
This is the prompt: "Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better. "

Dear roommate,
To help us get started off on the right foot, let me give you some quick tips about myself:
1. I'm fairly clumsy (somehow, though, I manage to coordinate my feet and arms in taekwondo). One of my favorite incidents that resulted from this ungainliness is when I ran around the living room yelling, "Nananananananana Batman!" and then tripped and fell headfirst onto the corner of a table. What a memory...

2. I'm quite curious. Naturally, I had to go to the emergency room after the Batman incident because the table corner had made astonishingly accurate contact with my face. Most kids, when they're rushed to the ER, are bawling and shrieking. I, though, remember waving my mom aside so I could see what was going on around me. I was a six year old child with blood gushing from my head, but instead of focusing on the pain, I wanted to see what the ER was like. Curiosity eclipsed any other thoughts.

3. I don't get easily discouraged. Though I underwent stitches precariously close to my eye after my unsuccessful attempt at being Batman, I quickly moved on to masquerading as Superman and attempted to soar from the top of the Empire State building (my stairs). Even today, I rarely give up on a task, whether it be tackling a difficult flute excerpt or reaching the highest score on Temple Run.

Now, as we're going to be rooming together, I hope you'll understand when I randomly trip or ask questions. Fortunately, I've now managed to channel my abundant curiosity and determination into the field of microbiology. I'm particularly interested in continuing my studies on spirochete bacteria because these microscopic entities have such significant roles in nature. They can both help us and harm us, either by acting as a primary food source or a cause of death.

Yes, I'm exceptionally curious- so much so that my desire to find answers will ultimately override frustrations along the way. I'm glad, though, to have found a niche where my questions can do more good than harm. Hopefully, my inquisitiveness will lead to the discovery of a new species of spirochete bacteria or another biological solution and not another trip to the ER. Only time and hard work will satisfy my own curiosity as to what the future holds.

As for the clumsiness, let's just hope that our room doesn't get too cluttered.

Looking forward to meeting you,
Nari

I'm about 350 characters over the limit, which is about 4 sentences, so if you see any areas where I could cut out stuff, much appreciated!

Also, please tell me your first impression (as in would you want to room with me based off of this). Thanks!

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 15, 2012   #2
I like your letter. And I'm sure your roommate would be very interested in being.. uhhh.. well roommates with you. :P

Maybe you could cut down a little bit of the bacteria talk.

But it's still a good letter. :)
reymiii - / 5  
Dec 15, 2012   #3
One of my favorite incidents that resulted from this ungainliness is when I ran around the living room yelling, "Nananananananana Batman!" and then tripped and fell headfirst onto the corner of a table. What a memory...

You can probably cut down on this sentence a little.

Or cut down on all of it a lot actually.
If you use really succinct bullet points it'd be really effective and you'd be able to make it really fun, too

something along the lines of

*I'm somewhat clumsy (taekwondo line)
*Once I ran around nananana line and my face made close contacnt with a corner of a table
*such close contact that i had to go to the ER but i wasn't scared, more curious

you get the idea, right? Its well written though so you could always just try cutting down the microbiology part.
OP nairbear68 6 / 29  
Dec 15, 2012   #4
thanks guys :)
i deleted

I'm particularly interested in continuing my studies on spirochete bacteria because these microscopic entities have such significant roles in nature. They can both help us and harm us, either by acting as a primary food source or a cause of death.

and i cut that sentence with nannaa batman, just 36 characters left!


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