Family convinced me my limits; Tufts Sup, How did your environment influence you

THANKS!

There is a Quaker saying: ''Let your life speak.'' Describe the environment in which you were raised-your family, home, neighborhood, or community-and how it influenced the person you are today. (200-250 words)

I was begging my dad, "Can I please, please, please with a cherry on top get the new Spongebob DVD?" After desperately asking for a solid ten minutes, I was given a challenge. "If you can ask a salesperson where to find it, we'll get it". I pleaded for my dad to do ask for me, but my dad was persistent; if I really wanted to get that DVD, I needed to ask for assistance. At this point, I was a tiny and shy seven years old, and asking an adult I'd never met before for help felt somewhat like the end of the world. I finally gave in to my dad, reluctantly, and went to complete the daunting task. Contrary to what I had believed, my world did not turn upside down, I was still alive and well. Even though it was such a terrifying task in the moment, I now hold confidence and look forward to speaking with those I have just met, as well as in public.

I am thankful for a family that has pushed my limits; they've given me encouragement whenever I felt fear or resentment towards doing. They've showed me that I can be independent, and that I can challenge myself to discovering my abilities.

"I was a tiny, shy seven-year-old"

"I reluctantly gave in to my dad, and went to complete the daunting task."

Everything else sounds good!

Even though it was such a terrifying task in the moment, I now hold confidence and look forward to speaking with those I have just met, as well as in public.

The transition here is just a little confusing. You may want to add a sentence in their to bridge the two ideas. The way it is now sounds like at that moment in the store you became a great speaker.

If you could take a look at my UVA supplement (take 2) that'd be appreciated

this is a suggestion for a replacement.

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this is a small issue, but it is well-written which makes it more interesting. have you submitted your application yet?