Can somebody also read my UC Prompt #1??
*
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I have always thought that the environment in which a person lives in determines their personality and behavior, both positive and negative. The environment also shapes a person's qualities. By using the word "environment," I don't mean where a person lives, but the behaviors and words of the people around that person. My parents have told me a Chinese proverb they learned during childhood - "One takes on the color of one's company." From school, I have learned that "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy."
I feel very fortunate that I have great company, my family and school. My mother would always yell at me often, but it was for my benefit. When I started playing video games or playing basketball despite not finishing my homework, she would force me to finish it. As I got older, I became wiser and realized she was right, that I should set my priorities straight. Video games and a basketball will always be everywhere, but not school work.
My brothers also helped shaped my personality and behavior. My older brother never worked hard during high school, so he decided to join the Army and might be deployed to Afghanistan in January. He told me not to make the same mistake he made and that I should work hard in all activities. My little brother has helped me through optimism. When I do something bad or wrong, I should cheer myself up and do better the next time I get the opportunity.
My father has shaped myself by teaching me to have adaptation, self-discipline, tolerance, and patience. We always got into arguments as to whether who was right, who was wrong when I was young. As I got older I realized he taught me how to be patient, tolerant, and adaptive and have self-discipline indirectly. Being patient, rather than being hot-headed, has usually led me to better results. Being self-discipline and tolerant has circumvented me from potential and fights. Being adaptive allows me fit in better as he taught me that in the real world, employers expect people to adapt to them and not the other way around. The qualities I learned from my dad have and will help me in the real word.
School has played a big part in developing my personality, character, and behavior. I developed friends through class, recess, and sports. I joined school clubs, sport teams and started being more gregarious throughout my childhood years. I have made numerous friends from these activities. I learned that although school is important, it shouldn't be all work. Students should learn to enjoy themselves because if they only work throughout school without socializing, they won't become a well-rounded person.
My world has developed and shaped me into the person I am now as well as the person I will become. My parents have taught me to prioritize, be adaptive, self-discipline, tolerant, and patient. My brothers taught me to work hard and always have optimism. School has taught me to be confident and enjoy life in the moment. All of the qualities that I have obtained throughout my childhood years allow me to continue to purse my dreams and aspirations, and who I want to be.
Word count is 537 words.
*
Prompt #1 (freshman applicants)
Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I have always thought that the environment in which a person lives in determines their personality and behavior, both positive and negative. The environment also shapes a person's qualities. By using the word "environment," I don't mean where a person lives, but the behaviors and words of the people around that person. My parents have told me a Chinese proverb they learned during childhood - "One takes on the color of one's company." From school, I have learned that "All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy."
I feel very fortunate that I have great company, my family and school. My mother would always yell at me often, but it was for my benefit. When I started playing video games or playing basketball despite not finishing my homework, she would force me to finish it. As I got older, I became wiser and realized she was right, that I should set my priorities straight. Video games and a basketball will always be everywhere, but not school work.
My brothers also helped shaped my personality and behavior. My older brother never worked hard during high school, so he decided to join the Army and might be deployed to Afghanistan in January. He told me not to make the same mistake he made and that I should work hard in all activities. My little brother has helped me through optimism. When I do something bad or wrong, I should cheer myself up and do better the next time I get the opportunity.
My father has shaped myself by teaching me to have adaptation, self-discipline, tolerance, and patience. We always got into arguments as to whether who was right, who was wrong when I was young. As I got older I realized he taught me how to be patient, tolerant, and adaptive and have self-discipline indirectly. Being patient, rather than being hot-headed, has usually led me to better results. Being self-discipline and tolerant has circumvented me from potential and fights. Being adaptive allows me fit in better as he taught me that in the real world, employers expect people to adapt to them and not the other way around. The qualities I learned from my dad have and will help me in the real word.
School has played a big part in developing my personality, character, and behavior. I developed friends through class, recess, and sports. I joined school clubs, sport teams and started being more gregarious throughout my childhood years. I have made numerous friends from these activities. I learned that although school is important, it shouldn't be all work. Students should learn to enjoy themselves because if they only work throughout school without socializing, they won't become a well-rounded person.
My world has developed and shaped me into the person I am now as well as the person I will become. My parents have taught me to prioritize, be adaptive, self-discipline, tolerant, and patient. My brothers taught me to work hard and always have optimism. School has taught me to be confident and enjoy life in the moment. All of the qualities that I have obtained throughout my childhood years allow me to continue to purse my dreams and aspirations, and who I want to be.
Word count is 537 words.