Please help me to make this entrance essay to sound better and pleasing to the reader. Thank You. Prompt: Many students decide to apply to Emory University based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons as a possible college choice, why is Emory University a particularly good match for you?
If Emory University was my older brother, I would look up to him. We would drink coke until the moon would rise, and we would continue to tell each other our personal adventures until our mother hushed us to bed. Once our mother was sound asleep, we would sneak out into the open world and discover life's treasures.
Emory would show me the great lessons that are needed to be learned from the open world and overall, teach me to be a better person. He would introduce me to the multiple features of a perfect Emory education, whether it is within the U.S. or across open seas. Although I would seek Emory as almost an older brother, I would truly observe him as a true mentor. After all, he can teach me whatever I wanted to learn.
Even if you are poor or rich, Emory provides true cultural diversity and allows the students to have the freedom to study in any particular area of interest. As a well rounded school, I believe that Emory would give me an excellent opportunity to study medicine. He would introduce me to his good friends the Emory Medical School and the Emory Hospital and allow me to catalyze my abilities with his buddies to become a great future physician.
As a soon-to-be undergraduate, I believe Emory is the best school for me. I feel a form of kinship with the school, and I know for certain that Emory will give me the best education in the nation. Who is to say that one day Emory and I will be true soul brothers?
If Emory University was my older brother, I would look up to him. We would drink coke until the moon would rise, and we would continue to tell each other our personal adventures until our mother hushed us to bed. Once our mother was sound asleep, we would sneak out into the open world and discover life's treasures.
Emory would show me the great lessons that are needed to be learned from the open world and overall, teach me to be a better person. He would introduce me to the multiple features of a perfect Emory education, whether it is within the U.S. or across open seas. Although I would seek Emory as almost an older brother, I would truly observe him as a true mentor. After all, he can teach me whatever I wanted to learn.
Even if you are poor or rich, Emory provides true cultural diversity and allows the students to have the freedom to study in any particular area of interest. As a well rounded school, I believe that Emory would give me an excellent opportunity to study medicine. He would introduce me to his good friends the Emory Medical School and the Emory Hospital and allow me to catalyze my abilities with his buddies to become a great future physician.
As a soon-to-be undergraduate, I believe Emory is the best school for me. I feel a form of kinship with the school, and I know for certain that Emory will give me the best education in the nation. Who is to say that one day Emory and I will be true soul brothers?