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Many students decide to apply to Emory College based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons for making Emory College a possible college choice, why is Emory College a particularly good match for you?
I first heard of Emory when a classmate mentioned that a friend had just been accepted to the college. The response she received consisted of "Wow"s, "Good for her"s and "That's impressive"s. At that moment I wanted to be this mysterious Emory freshman-to-be. I wanted to be talked about in this way when I was in college.
That day I went home and researched Emory, and I certainly was impressed. At first, I felt only a superficial attraction, but as I dug deeper, I grew more and more attached to the college. It seemed perfect in every aspect, from the world renowned professors and 7:1 student to faculty ratio, to the incredible study abroad program.
I was impressed by the Presidential Award for General Community Service that the university won in 2008. Being actively involved in community service has made me realise how much of an importance it holds in my life, and the community service opportunities at Emory, particularly The SPAN project, appealed to me greatly.
Emory's other major hook was its diversity and open-mindedness. I have lived all my life in the ostensibly secular India, where, in truth, animosity exists between every community and religion. It would be refreshing for me to finally be exposed to an environment devoid of social stigma, and to be able to associate with people from a variety of backgrounds and cultures. The diversity of the campus would open my eyes to new ideas, and at the same time make me feel welcome and at home.
Emory College would provide me with the intellectual stimulation I crave, and mold me into the person I aspire to be, and I can think of no better place to spend the next four years of my life.
Many students decide to apply to Emory College based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons for making Emory College a possible college choice, why is Emory College a particularly good match for you?
I first heard of Emory when a classmate mentioned that a friend had just been accepted to the college. The response she received consisted of "Wow"s, "Good for her"s and "That's impressive"s. At that moment I wanted to be this mysterious Emory freshman-to-be. I wanted to be talked about in this way when I was in college.
That day I went home and researched Emory, and I certainly was impressed. At first, I felt only a superficial attraction, but as I dug deeper, I grew more and more attached to the college. It seemed perfect in every aspect, from the world renowned professors and 7:1 student to faculty ratio, to the incredible study abroad program.
I was impressed by the Presidential Award for General Community Service that the university won in 2008. Being actively involved in community service has made me realise how much of an importance it holds in my life, and the community service opportunities at Emory, particularly The SPAN project, appealed to me greatly.
Emory's other major hook was its diversity and open-mindedness. I have lived all my life in the ostensibly secular India, where, in truth, animosity exists between every community and religion. It would be refreshing for me to finally be exposed to an environment devoid of social stigma, and to be able to associate with people from a variety of backgrounds and cultures. The diversity of the campus would open my eyes to new ideas, and at the same time make me feel welcome and at home.
Emory College would provide me with the intellectual stimulation I crave, and mold me into the person I aspire to be, and I can think of no better place to spend the next four years of my life.