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Florida State University Admission Essay- How Vires Defines My Life



grocks6 3 / 10  
Dec 8, 2009   #1
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.

As a student, I use the intellectual strength that Vires defines to learn new information in a unique manner. I believe that the mind is created to be able to think beyond boundaries and the more that a person uses their own intellectually developed strength, the more easily those boundaries can be overstepped. Incredible discoveries and realizations can make the impossible seem more realistic and overall probable. It is because of my own outlook on learning that I personally feel that my intellectual strengths are best used. When I was one year old, I lived with my grandparents in China. Because my grandfather was a professor, his library of Chinese literature as well as history was extensive. Despite my narrow understanding of the language, I loved being able to browse through all the different types of books present. It was my favorite part of the entire day, when I would actually be allowed to go into his study. Every night, my grandfather would read one story to me and I would then be entranced, captivated for the rest of the night, my mind filled by the vivid images of life that the story would help detail. From those experiences, I developed a love for education and the written language that I have carried on with me through my high school years.

In order to continue the spirit of learning that I grew up with, I participate in my school's academic decathlon, Quiz Bowl. This is a fascinating competition as it involves fun and quirky facts about information associated with the areas of social studies, mathematics, science, the humanities, and english. Not only do I gain information about the chemical properties of elements such as tungsten and chlorine, I also get to learn that Odin was the father of all gods in Norse mythology and controlled the famous land of Valhalla. There are so many things that I can gain from participating in just one match of this competition and if I receive the opportunity, I will absolutely continue this at Florida State University because I consider that the act of learning persists no matter where I am as I can learn about the world around me or about worlds that I might never actually see or know. This is what the value of learning holds for me as I understand that there is so much knowledge that I can gain about the world.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 10, 2009   #2
I believe that the mind is created to be able to think beyond boundaries and that the more that a person uses their own intellectually developed strength, the more easily those boundaries can be overstepped.

You should use the first paragraph to tell the main idea, and then start another paragraph in order to talk about the books and your grandfather.

This makes it sound like you were reading books when you were one year old! :-)

You went way off subject here. I'm sorry! I think some serious revision is necessary. You have to keep writing about vires over the course of 3 paragraphs. That is my recommendation. For every new idea, start a new paragraph, and for every idea explain how it relates to vires.

Good luck!! :-)


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