Footprints on the Sand, and a Tree; Lehigh/ Unique aspect of Leigh

What unique aspect of Lehigh most interests you? (As a guideline, your response should be between 150-250 words.)

What I look for in a school is an academic and social environment that enables me to grow out towards a community and grow in depth in my knowledge and learn how to apply it to my life. As I researched about Lehigh, what struck me were the large branches that the university has, such as connections with other companies and connections outside the US like China, and their depth in education. Lehigh is like a tree. Its roots grow wide and deep, while it reaches to the sky. This is what I want my college to be like, so that I may grow in that similar fashion. I wish to attend a school that not only serves my best interest but also nurture me so I can employ my knowledge into actions, transfiguring my knowledge to wisdom. By that effect, I can aid the community and the people around me as the poet Henry Wadsworth Longfellow asserted in his poem, "A Psalm of Life".

Lives of great men all remind us
We can make our lives sublime,
And, departing, leave behind us
Footprints on the sand of time;

Footprints, that perhaps another,
Sailing o'er life's solemn main,
A forlorn and shipwrecked brother,
Seeing, shall take heart again.
So with Lehigh's unique devotion to students' connection to the world and to students' education, I hope to leave footprints in the sands of time. I'll leave behind both the same legacy as the school, and reflect the tree that Lehigh is.

Does anyone know whether what format I'm supposed to use if I'm quoting a poet? Also, this is really urgent! Please take a look at my essay, I'll look at yours too

I have NO idea if you can use a poem in your essay. teacherweb/MA/SharonHighSchool/Heller/hndpoetry.htm.html this website helped me when I was writing my essay on a poem.

I really like your simile, "Lehigh is like a tree." It draws a picture of Lehigh's education (and helps people understand Lehigh's assets even if they don't know anything about Lehigh), but I think you should elaborate on what the roots are and what branches that reach the sky are. I also think you should elaborate on Lehigh's "depth in education" because there isn't that much about it.

I think you can draw a parallel with you helping the community and a tree, since trees help communities by providing oxygen, and possibly fruits. But this is only a suggestion, and most likely requires more elaboration, but we are short on time right now.

I also think you should try to make the one unique aspect about Lehigh stand out from the rest of your essay (I believe the unique aspect of your essay was its connections and depth in education).

By the way, take my response with a grain of salt because I don't know what Lehigh wants, and I'm not the best in English.

Best of luck! Hope I helped!

thanks, your corrections helped a lot! I made them and my essay looks better :) though i feel that i might have to cut the quote shorter, so i won't go over the word limit...