"The Forbidden Apple", 2050 Movie of my life. NYU

"The Forbidden Apple"

A boy from an underdeveloped island in China emigrated to America, lived by himself, graduated from the prestigious New York University. This very man also became one of the world's top business leader. How did he do it? What's the story behind this boy who lived by himself and what will be his fate? All he had was an ambitious mind.

I'm not quite sure about the originality of this title. But... take it as something to consider.


Don't you think this is someone who is trying too much to impress the Admissions Committee? Try to think about that.


I like the vision here but try to word it differently. :)


You're giving a storyline, so try to be straightforward.

Sorry if I was too harsh. But those are just things that you should think about. I'm not an expert on these so... take them as suggestions from someone like you.

If you have time, feedbacks on mine will be appreciated.

It's a little ambiguous and I don't really see a plotline. Good idea, but I think you need to get an actual storyline out of it somehow!

Im going to have to agree with saygoodbyevince.

A boy from an underdeveloped island in China emigrated to America, lived by himself, and graduated from the prestigious New York University. This very man also became one of the world's top business leaders . How did he do it? What's the story behind this boy who lived by himself and what will be his fate? All he had was an ambitious mind.this last bit feels awkward

A boy from an underdeveloped island in China emigrated to America, lived by himself, and attended college, where another new world awaits him. Finished college in three years, with some help of his father, he expanded the family business and made it international. Eventually, he became one of the world's top business leaders. Of course, somewhere along the line, he fell in love.

how about now? some feedbacks plz