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I won four rounds; UCHICAGO SUPP_ARCH NENEMIS



kabal 9 / 61  
Dec 27, 2012   #1
A man cannot be too careful in the choice of his enemies." -Oscar Wilde.
Othello and Iago. Dorothy and the Wicked Witch. e Autobots and the Decepticons. History and art are full of heroes and their enemies.
Tell us about the relationship between you and your arch-nemesis (either real or imagined

Evanston, not has windy has Chicago, but living close to the lake surely feels like it. The view of lake from my room looks beautiful and calm, unlike my sleep last night. It made me think about the immense power of God, but I ask myself if God is listening to my prayers. I lost last night's battle to my arch nemesis, sleep, just like I have done many previous nights before and the lady gaga's song playing in my neighbor's apartment didn't help. It is easy for some people to underestimate the power of sleep. For me, it is very difficult to sleep. Sleep is like a gladiator I do battle with eight to nine hours available to sleep, in which I win one to two hours.

My battle with sleep started about the time our house burned down and I have been on a losing streak ever since. However, I have tried everything humanly possible to defeat sleep. I have even tried using well known law (sleep) enforcement like lorezepam, lunesta, but they have all failed me.

However, December 12 would be different because I had my final exams in my calculus two class. This exams would decide if I got an A or experience the agony of a B, moreover I had new plan for both passing my exams and sleep, which I called the natural knockout out.

Firstly, I had to over the laborious experience of eat vegetables, including BROCLL for breakfast, which I somehow overcame by imagining my vegetable was same has the vegetables in the Progresso commercial.

Later in the day, I decided to finish reading Robert Ludlum's Apocalypse Watch. The key to this new plan was to be tired both physically and mentally so I decided to play soccer for about three hours. Feeling physically tired, I had to make my brain feel the same. Reviewing my test was relatively easier, but my thought began to drift has I got closer to bed time. It was the countdown of a boxing match between Muhammad Ali, I, and mike Tyson, which was sleep.

10pm, on my bed just staring at Isaac Newton's dark eye brown on my ceiling. 10:30PM, still nothing. BUM BUM, my neighbor has decided to help out mike Tyson, sleep, by playing 50 cent. 11:30, I decided I also needed help. I put on head phone and searched for a song that might put me to sleep. Found one of Celine Dion's songs, but it was too depressing. Found Devenire, a classical music by Ludovico Einaudi, very soothing playing of the piano and violin and...

3:00pm it work. I slept for almost four hours. I couldn't believe I won four rounds. Sleep must be feeling bad right now. Even though I lost this battle, I am sure sleep knows I have found a technique different from drugs or needles, nature. I am sure the war is mine to lose.

WHAT DO YOU THINK. i don't if this is better than my other essay on silence. your Opinion is extremely valuable

sj1912 3 / 18  
Dec 27, 2012   #2
Evanston, not h as windy h as Chicago, surely feels like it as I live near a/the lake .

sleep

why dont you personify sleep. or if you have, it should be "Sleep"!

lady gaga's

capitalize

the lady gaga's song playing in my neighbor's apartment was of little help .

. It is easy for some people to underestimate the power of sleep. For me, it is very difficult to sleep.

useless line! u make it clear in d next one!

Sleep is like the gladiator who I battle in the eight to nine hours available to sleep,winning for hardly two hours.

see there a a lot of grammatical and logical errors and i culdnt finish th whole thing! be clear about ur idea and be fluid in ur essay, dnt jump ideas.d idea is great but execution is faulty. if u dnt get mre positive ffeedbak , switch t he other one which u think is better!

P.S.- i need help too!!
OP kabal 9 / 61  
Dec 27, 2012   #3
thanks for being frank. I haven't check the grammar, i just thought of it now.
zdv 12 / 68  
Dec 27, 2012   #4
great essay. kept me hooked. however i got confused around the end. you kept changing stances between winning and losing. i did not wuite grasp if you think you lost the battle or won it. so a little more clarity would do much good.
OP kabal 9 / 61  
Dec 29, 2012   #5
Thanks. I wanted help on my silence essay. Since we are writing on the same topic.
hellogoodbye 2 / 20  
Dec 29, 2012   #6
There are a lot of grammatical errors and the essay isn't very focused.

This exams would decide if I got an A or experience the agony of a B, moreover I had new plan for passing my exams and sleeping, which I called the natural knockout out.

^Very random run-on sentence that doesn't make a lot of sense.


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